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No clue what to title this.....any suggestions would be appreciated!
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No clue what to title this.....any suggestions would be appreciated! |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
Untitled for now....if anyone has an idea let me know! thanks. ‘I love you’ she said i love you more than you will ever know it was raining as she stood in the road watching the rain soak into the ground into her jacket. screaming to him lying on the road she grasped his hand allowing the warmth of her to pass into him she rose to her feet the sirens blaring the rain increasing the voices of people all around. but as she looked down at her love she knew that staying would do no good he was not to come back all the sound quieted and all that could be heard was the beat of her heart crying within her chest she turned glanced backwards and then walked endlessly forward her vision blurred by tears "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
wow... I can't comment, I am at a loss for words... I will be back later to comment... wow... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Miracle Junior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 22 |
This poem is so beautiful it almost made me cry. As of what to title it I have a few ideas altough i think that a poem such as this should have a wonderous title and so I know my titles would not really do. Look in your heart i'm sure you'll find something wonderful. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. I like the mental image I got from the blur of tears at the end. Great job on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is sad. What a terible tragedy, but what a great poem. This is penned beautifully. A tittle? (((???))) All I can do is think of all those generic ones... sry. Thanks for sharing this. Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This was writen so well, the images were all clear in my mind, nice job! I really like the way this story is told, is it true? "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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