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Will DeVore
Junior Member

since 2001-01-01

Posts 12
Weddington, NC, USA

0 posted 2001-01-06 05:40 PM

Quickly drifting
Down that lonesome stream
Someday you shall arrive
At that strange place
In your mind
In your heart
In your soul
Everything
All together
Will synchronize
Harmony will ensue
On your way you shall go
And soon you will know
What it means to have
Gone and gone away
And eventually come back
With much more
Than you had before
You left

1/6/01

-= Will =-

Author Unknown
Member

since 2001-01-05

Posts 57
Linn MO USA

1 posted 2001-01-06 05:43 PM

nice poem man, i enjoyed it, hope to see more of it

*dont let life bring you down, dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn....2001

IsGona
Senior Member

since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

2 posted 2001-01-06 06:15 PM

Great poem. you wrote w/ such an awsome style here. Much liked. Thanks for sharing
Jason

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
~Hatebreed~

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-01-06 06:25 PM

I like the simplicity of this one. It allows lots of thinking on the part of the reader. Very well done.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-01-06 09:03 PM

This was great. Very good poem......it gets my neurons running. The ending is great.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

5 posted 2001-01-06 11:49 PM

I love this...

On your way you shall go
And soon you will know
What it means to have
Gone and gone away
And eventually come back
With much more
Than you had before
You left

This is a great poem... I love it!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

6 posted 2001-01-07 01:22 PM

I think Allan's reply says it all, great job on this poem.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-01-07 08:02 PM

recently, i've been noticing punctuated words in the end of poems, and i love it. it's a style i wish to learn. Your thoughts are well penned on this one. Thanks for the read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

8 posted 2001-01-10 03:34 PM

Will, I am impressed... truly!

keep up the good work...

-Tier

jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

9 posted 2001-01-10 05:24 PM

beautiful words (lonesome stream, harmony) I really enjoyed reading this one.
Keep writing!
~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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