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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
You are far away too far for my heart to bear far away you are how i wish i didn't care If i looked into your eyes Theres no doubt that i would cry for the love that we both have for the love we can never try Theres a glass wall between us it separates us in every way i cant even reach out to you life has just got me so afraid Maybe if we smashed the glass and ran away to a whole new life ya, we'd be together, but look at the mess we'd leave behind |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Glass wall... great metaphor. A fragile, invisible barrier that seperates you two. Your fear for shattering the glass, because you don't want to make a mess, is an odd dilemma. By a mess, i assume that you mean family and friends hurt by it somehow? This is the impression that I get. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I saw the same things Allen did, I think this is such a good poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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GirlsBestFriend Member
since 2000-12-27
Posts 71Planet Earth |
I like it! u have an excellent imagination, layla. keep it up! ~lots of luv "Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful poem, i love it...sorry to hear about your situation. things will get better. positive thinking helps  thanks for the readI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Author Unknown Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 57Linn MO USA |
awesome, the best poems come from the heart and emotional exeriences, loved it totally incredible *dont let life bring you down dig thru the ditches and deck it in the face and reclaim your place*---Kyle Finn.....2001 |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here. I liked it a lot. You'd leave a mess behind, but you just might be a bit happier regardless.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Yes, yes, I agree with Dopey... Great work here  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I will have to disagree with DD's advice... if you would be leaving a mess just so that you would feel better, isn't that a bit selfish? I would try to carefully ease it into being, instead of "shattering" the glass try to get through slowly, so that you leave less mess. Then you can be happy without hurting so many so much. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Nice poem Layla. I like what allen said... Maybe you can get past this wall with out shattering it and making a mess. In any case I think you need to conquer this "glass wall" don't just walk a way from it. Great poem Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I have to agree with Jason here... I think that you need to investigate why there is a glass wall here... you obviously like this guy and by the looks he likes you, but there is something standing in your way... possibly something that allows great friendship, but not great love... Find out what this Glass wall is keeping you apart for and then conquer it and find everlasting love and happiness!! Good Luck Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
somehow, someway you have to reach through this wall... i loved the poem, it was really expressed well best wishes ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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