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Ringing in the New Year (A comedy)
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Ringing in the New Year (A comedy) |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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This is the story of my New Year's Bash. It's not the best poem I've ever written (actually, it's probably one of the worst), but it's kinda fun, so I thought I'd share it. 2001 is coming tonight! Thoughts of joy, and thoughts of fright Whatever happens, we go out with some fun Never stopping ‘till the sight of the sun Look now! The party’s started with six Even though we have no drinks to mix The oldest one is seventeen We will have no drinks, it seems But that’s ok, we can still have fun And party until the sight of the sun Things started out kind of slow People talked of places to go And then we turned the music loud Six of us had become a crowd! Midnight nears, and we have a dispute Of what we will do in our great tribute We’ve made our decision as midnight strikes Six nude teens in the snow… yikes! We celebrate anew with each time zone We played board games, for reasons I don’t know Watching MTV’s party 5 times in a row As the night wore on, people began to go… The first one fell at 4 am Just fell over on old Christmas ham And now, the party is going with 5 Still enough to keep the rocking alive! The second went with the news at 5 The third went soon after a glorious fight The fourth was gone when the sky turned pink We three were too tired even to think Our party was beginning to die, you see Because we were only left with three I knew whom sleep would soon overtake My friend, conversing with a snake He was gone soon after six A brave fighter, he will be missed Oh, what is a girl to do! Our troops were down to only two Poor Gina made it to 7am When the sun had touched the air I saw her in the fetal position On a carpeted flight of stairs It’s really hard to keep the fun When your party has only one I saw the carnage of the old sandman One guy was even on the fan! Stepping over bodies left and right Oh, the snoring… a terrible fright! Before I gave in at 8:15 I pondered last night’s party scene As a pulled a pillow near I sighed, already dreaming of next year! May you all find hope in the promise of this new year and in the promise of each sunrise. God bless you in 2001!!! < !signature--> "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 01-01-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this was soo awesome and funny too i really liked the escalation (i use that word a lot) in the poem also the relation to your friends as troops was quite witty a wonderful read! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice poem....happy new years to you lovebug!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
LOL Erica! So tell me, how much of that was actually true, you party animal?  Hehehe, great read, nice to know someone had an exciting time! *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
LoveBug: *L* This is a classic..If this is true, good to see you enjoyed yourself!! ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
ROFL ... Wow ... you sure had a better time than me Erica! This was a wonderful read, you made me feel like I was right there, lots of fun! Happy New Year Erica!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
i liked this a lot LOL nice rendition of a new years party, it was very funny  we should have more comic poems in the forum!!~*Pixie*~ |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Thank you all for your wonderful replies! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This was good, and happy new year "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Six nude teens in the snow...YIKES is right! Sounds like you had a fun New Year's celebration, Erica.  |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
that was kool!i cant stop laughing. It would have been hilarious to see 6 nude teens in the snow...lol. i have to agree its a classic if true. Regina |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So who needs to drink???... Cute, LB... Very cute..  |
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