>>>>The Chosen<<<< (The title's in the right place this time! woohoo!!)

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Virgil
Junior Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-01 02:49 AM

The Chosen

Alone on a plain, a curious man softly sits,
As darkness rolls in and trees shake with thunder.
Shooting stars burst through the cold fall night;
Rain sounds, pitter-patter; his mind fills with wonder.

Soaked and damp, the man moves not,
Whilst the falling stars streak one by one.
The gleaming tails burn throughout the sky,
And the man judges from whence they come.

The trees that did shake, behind this ancient man,
Began to glow with unparalleled verve!
The man, in surprise, turns full circle;
A gawk and aghast; inlaid lack of nerve.

Full of beauty and light, heat and peril;
That man learns the secrets of nature.
Bringing it with him, wherever he goes,
It becomes his own tamed, once-wild creature.

A light, a warmth, a weapon, a boon!
A savior to man when the wind blows in.
These men are so feeble, weak and frail!
Even they cannot see how they are the chosen...

Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

1 posted 2001-01-01 03:53 AM

What a beautiful poem, I can see that a lot of thought and effort has gone into this... you should be very proud of this one!! Keep up the great work!!

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Isabelle
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since 1999-08-25

Posts 176
Indiana

2 posted 2001-01-01 12:38 PM

I have to agree with Melz. A poem well written. Keep it up.

Jeanna

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

3 posted 2001-01-01 04:46 PM

another good one here... this one was full of nature and imagery, i liked it.

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2001-01-01 10:36 PM

This was such a good poem...you have so much talent. You never cease to amaze me. I cant wait to see more from you! Keep em comin hun!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-01-01 11:24 PM

This was great. You have talent.....hope to see more.

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I admire it daily

Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

6 posted 2001-01-02 12:37 PM

This is a totally AWESOME job! I wish I could write like that....Anyways keep you the good work. Thanks for sharing.

Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

7 posted 2001-01-02 12:37 PM

This is a totally AWESOME job! I wish Icould write like that....Anyways keep you the good work. Thanks for sharing.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

8 posted 2001-01-02 03:31 PM

Great imagery in this one! I agree, it seems very well thought out. Great work

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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

9 posted 2001-01-02 04:30 PM

i loved it!great job with it!! so much power.
i agree, it must have been well though out and be very proud!
Regina

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

10 posted 2001-01-02 06:50 PM

This is so imaginative and the imagery is beautiful... it really adds to the poem. Great job here!

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