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But a Dream
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But a Dream |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
More darkness... Look at me At who you are Pleasant to the eyes But you bear the scars The scars of love forever lost You played the game You paid the cost Lost and lonely You're afraid Looking back at choices That you've made They're all behind They cannot change Just places in time You live a life Full of regrets You build your fortune On all your debts Surrounded by your enemies No one now Can set you free You fear the rage Of fear itself You place your feelings On a shelf Place them out of reach Taking notes on the lessons Life will teach Inside your head You hear my words You are hanging On the verge Of a hole swallowing you No one appears No one to help you You let go And fall so deep Then you awake From your sleep Is everything as it seems Or is life But a dream Thomas ( Jac Pierre ) Life is like a TV sitcom... every episode leaves you hanging.---Thomas A. Plemmons |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a very good piece. i enjoyed it very much. i long to read more of your work and i'll be looking for more posts from you so do keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Ok Jac-Pierre, I havn't heard that name in a while. Any way I like this one alot, your so good you make me look bad. jason |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Maybe it's the themes of your writing that grab me so tightly. Everything I picture while reading your writing is like some sort of hazy dream state...it's truly quite intriguing to me. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The scars of love forever lost You played the game You paid the cost" Great writing Thomas! You've captured an almost mystical feel about this ... really well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Definately hit the head of the nail on this one Thomas! I think at times we all feel like this. Anyways, wonderful writing!! Keep it up!! Love Always~*~PrYnCeSs JeSs~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
That's one of the best one's I've read from you, definetely one of my favorites. Good choice of subject; it had a really good pattern and flow to it. Very nice, keep it up Bel |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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