Teen Poetry #3 |
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Light Switch Mannerisms |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico ![]() |
Light Switch Mannerisms: On and off! On and off! I'm trapped in a light switch horror Engulfed within a loss of heart. Off and on! Off and on! Contemplating over what to do With the everything of nothing. On and off! On and off! I keep treading these cold tiles While eyeing concret errosion and iron rust. Off and on! Off and on! These are the things people do Just because they have to. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i have a feeling this has to do with your relationship? Well, i liked the relation between the two, great post as usual! ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Virgil Junior Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 43Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Hey, I really like this one! It's like 2:46 am and i'm responding to it...haha! I like the way it starts with a lightbulb type idea, and then escalates towards a much more meaningful idea; like the Mannerisms of people! (Great title by the way!) "By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee." "Ending a sentence with a preposition is somethi |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i agree with everyone else. the light bulb idea seemed to have much more meaning than just a light bulb...ummm...yeah. i liked the title. good one. Regina those who love us,will always love us.those who hate us,may g-d turn their hearts,if he cant may he turn their ankles so we can see them by their limp |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks guys......i appreciate what you think about this one. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DD~ I enjoyed this. My favorite lines were - 'Contemplating over what to do With the everything of nothing.' And haven't we all been there ? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I'm gonna have to say that this is great. I like it because, well, because I just do ![]() "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Good poem. ![]() |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Javier- as usual brilliant work ![]() ~*Justine*~ |
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