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lilpoet
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since 2000-12-30
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Dallas,Tx

0 posted 2000-12-30 11:52 PM


You're more than just yourself
There's another guy
Something only I can see
You hide it and I don't know why

True words you've never spoken
Except when you love
You're just too afraid
To get your heart broken

Inside you're scared
And you don't know where to go
Everythings so confusing
You just need to take it slow

There's another guy
Someone that I love
He's an angel
Sent from above

When I'm scared
You help me confront my fears
When I'm sad
You're there to dry my tears

You're tough
Unlike me
When things fall apart
I lose all control of me

When I have a broken heart
You're there to mend
I've never known anyone
To be this good of a friend

You're more than just yourself
You're my best friend
I will always love you
And love doesn't have an end


© Copyright 2000 Nicole Chandler - All Rights Reserved
jeremydraul
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State of Despair
1 posted 2000-12-30 11:53 PM


very sentimental, i loved all the nice words you had to say!

~JDR

"A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis

lilpoet
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Dallas,Tx
2 posted 2000-12-31 12:06 PM


I feel rude.  I didn't introduce myself. My name is Nicole and I'm from Tx.  I'm 15 yrs. old and I have been writing poetry for about a year.  I hope ya'll enjoy my poetry.  I was motivated to write by love experiences.  Please reply and let me know what you think, because no one else has really looked at my poetry before.

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

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3 posted 2000-12-31 12:19 PM


Welcome to passions Nicole!! It was very nice of you to introduce yourself to us   Lemme introduce myself to you...My name is Michele and i'm from NY and i'm 15 too..so if you ever wanna talk just IM me on Acabalena36   As for your poem i think it was a great first post. I know that you'll love it here...theres no better place to post your poetry..everyone in here is so nice, im shur that you'll love it just as much as the rest of us. I cant wait to see more of your work! Welcome  
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4 posted 2000-12-31 12:20 PM


Don't feel rude! I didn't intro myself either   . That was a great first post! Can't wait to read more!

~*Skyfire< !signature-->

*~Always Canadian*~
~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~




[This message has been edited by Skyfire (edited 12-31-2000).]

DreamerGrl27
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Posts 142

5 posted 2000-12-31 12:20 PM


:Welcome to Passions : I really liked this poem. It flowed really well and the meaning was really sweet. You definetly have a talent for writing. I started writing poetry because of love experiences also...it makes me let out all of my feelings. You expressed yourself really well in this poem. I really loved the last two lines: 'I will always love you/And love doesn't have an end'  Keep writing and posting!!
Alwye
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6 posted 2000-12-31 12:20 PM


Definitely very sweet and sentimental.  Welcome to passions, it's wonderful to have you with us!  Hope to read much more of your work soon!  

*Krista Knutson*

I'm a slow dying flower
In a frost-killing hour
The sweet turning sour and untouchable...
-Natalie Merchant

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7 posted 2000-12-31 02:06 AM


Welcome to Passions......nice job on this one. I hope to see you post more.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


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8 posted 2000-12-31 09:24 AM


Welcome, Welcome. This is very sweet. I liked it, keep it up!  
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


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9 posted 2000-12-31 02:43 PM


Nicole, i was the same way...before i came to passions, i NEVER let anyone read my poetry. but now, the ppl here do, and my boyfriend, justin,(trust me, you read any of my poetry, youll get to kno him), but i never let anyone else even see my journal i keep it in Welcome to Passions!!! You'll love it here!!!

~*~ Tamma Loves Justin ~*~


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lilpoet
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10 posted 2000-12-31 03:38 PM


Thanks for your replys!  I am deeply greatful.  Ya'll are really sweet and I already feel like this is home.  No one in my family or any of my friends except my boyfriend appreciate my poetry.  I love to be around people that do.

~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~

~sugarpie313~
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11 posted 2000-12-31 07:54 PM


This brought tears to my eyes. especially the last line. Well i didn't introduce myself either! i'm Valerie, i just recently turned 16, i live in Maine (up in the boonies LOL).
ya'll can message me on icq 81627330 or on msn messenger dumb_blonde_24@hotmail.com!  
i love this poem... it's so... pure and from the heart.

~*VALERIE*~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

Melster
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Brisbane, Qld, Australia
12 posted 2001-01-01 02:52 AM


Great poem... look forward to more!!

Melz!!

P.S.  A very warm welcome!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

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13 posted 2001-01-02 07:13 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

A wonderful first post.  What a way to show your appreciation to a friend.  Keep em coming.  thanks for sharing this  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Lakewalker
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14 posted 2001-01-03 01:27 PM


Welcome to Passions
This is a grat place to share, people here have a lot of complements to give.  Take the one I'm going to write for you: "Nice job on the poem, keep posting for us".  Yes, a much used set of phrases here, but still meaningful.  Thanks for introducing yourself and I do look forward to reading more


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