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Can't Make You Love Me (please read!)
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Can't Make You Love Me (please read!) |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA 
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Personally i don't think this poem is all that good....but I tried!! Can't Make You Love Me Look into my eyes Tell me what you see Do you see all the things You were looking for in me? Hold me close I don't want to go Will you stay with me? I have to know Wipe away my tears As I begin to cry Because the world has treated me wrong Life seems like a lie Whisper those sweet words Gently in my ear It's your sweet voice I always love to hear And when the time comes Will you set me free? I promise to come back Because we were meant to be I love you This I can't deny But I can't make you love me No matter how hard I try < !signature--> ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem is sad and sure you can't make him love you.......but you can try. Win him over.....show him your stuff. I used to like this girl for 3yrs.....she had boyfriends and well......i wrote poetry. I liked girls but was the biggest prude kid you'd ever met. Shy as hell......anyway.....i set my eyes only upon her and after a while i was like "im going for it"......and i did.......i told her i liked her and she said "oh i USED to like you".........that would crush somebody but it gave me this positive attitude.....like if she did like me i could win her over again. And you know what? If she said "well i dont like you".........i woulda thought...."you will soon"......Look it's all in the attitude.......think you can do it, and you just might........be positive...and go get him. There is no time to waste.......because time does not wait for anybody. As W.H. Auden said.... "O let not time deceive you. You cannot conquer time." So get out there and work it!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I agree with Dopey...it's all in the attitude. You can do it if you believe in yourself. This poem actually opened my eyes a bit about my own personal situation. And for that....you have my thanks.  This was a good poem...you displayed your emotions well. Good luck! Angel I am no one if not myself. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
I agree with everyone...you can't make someone love you, but you can try. I think it is about your attitude also. Try thinking positive and don't be afraid to tell someone how you feel, because they might feel the same way as you. You never know how another person feels about you until they tell you. I hope everything works out okay. I really loved the poem, it flowed really well and everything fit together perfectly. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is very sad....but don't let anything get in your way to getting what you want. Just know when the right time is to let it go. You are so young still, you still hvae so much more to come in the future. College specially  Stop writing such sad poems, you're making me teary eyedI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetypie5 Member
since 2000-10-06
Posts 97MWC,OK,USA |
Hey gurlie I know what you are going through! And even though you like him a lot he really doesn't deserve a great gurl like you! But if you really don't believe me and still want him...go after him! You can eventually win him over! Believe me...I am telling the truth!!! Hehe!! TTYL.....call me! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Well, if you don't consider this good, I'd love to see some of the stuff you think IS good! This is awesome! I just don't know what to say (once again... )!  Don't stop writing!!  ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
well there is one way you can make him love you.......lol....dont ever do that! i agree with everyone else its all in the attidude. this was good,btw Regina those who love us,will always love us.those who hate us,may g-d turn their hearts,if he cant may he turn their ankles so we can see them by their limp |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
well im after ina in like every one but all well anyways great poem and its sad but dont ever try to win someone try to make them want u and if they dont then guess what it wouldve never worked. "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Thanx for the advice dopey!! I really appreciate you all replying to my poem. You guys are just toooo nice!! < !signature-->Luv Always, Priscilla PS~ Sweetypie...thats what I have been trying to tell myself...but it just doesn't phase me.... Skyfire~ I don't really think much of my work is good at all. But if I had to pick a favorite...it would probably be...hhhmm....Someone Else's Life....actually I do think that poem is good. ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-31-2000).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
yea life sux in this way...you cant make someone love you...they kinda gotta do it themselfes and i know exactly what your going through cuz im kinda goin through the same thing now...i hope everything works out the way you want it to. Good poem |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This poem was very good! I agree with Dopey, however easier said than done. by the way Dopey, what ever happened with the girl after that? Did you get the hook up?? hehehexoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
That is absolutley gorgeous... I LOVE it!! GREAT work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
This was beautiful. Good work. Keep it up. Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You can't make someone love you, you can only make yourself someone that can be loved. Great job on the poem, I think it's relly good "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This poem rocks my WORLD!! Great work |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Sorry it took me so long to reply... I mean you posted this one way back in 2000. So ignore my tardyness, this was a good poem. LakeWalker said exactly what I wanted to say  Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Hey sorry you guys I have been a little busy w/ making up school lately but I'm back now! Thanx for replying to my poem, you guys are awesome!! Much luv, ~*~Priscilla~*~ PS~ it's ok Isgona!!! How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you" and mean it, but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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