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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
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0 posted 2000-07-02 09:25 PM


Cruel World

The world can be so cruel and harsh
It makes me want to cry
It turns its back on me
I ask myself why
Sometimes my friends leave
They too turn away
And I just wait in hoping
Tomorrow is another day
Sometimes things are more than I can take
It makes me want to scream
But when it all seems too much
I still have my dream
Sometimes people are rude and cruel
They care not how others feel
Their words hurt and scar
Because I believe it’s all real
Sometimes I get so lost
But I know one thing is true
When the whole world turns away
I still have one thing
You

To all of you that have read my past poems, this is off my usual topic.  I wrote this about my boyfriend, and I guess the rest is pretty self-expanitory.  Thanks for reading-
Bel



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Chel
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
1 posted 2000-07-02 09:37 PM


Hey there, I loved this poem.  I haven't read any of your other work.  I hope that they are as good as this one.  Well written.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
2 posted 2000-07-02 10:58 PM


Bel- Glad to see something on the brighter side from you!! It was most definately brilliant! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~
~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
3 posted 2000-07-03 01:02 AM


very well written i love this one and yes i agree it is kind of on the up side for you. but very much enjoyed keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-07-03 07:58 AM


This was wonderful Bel!  It's so nice to have someone to hold onto through the down sides of life. Terrific poem, loved the closing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

LoveBug
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5 posted 2000-07-03 11:37 AM


This is a beautiful piece. I'm so glad that you've found someone who makes you feel this way.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Jose Marti
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 374
washing DC
6 posted 2000-07-04 01:45 AM


I loved this poem. Be thankful that you have someone that loves you. You really are a very good poet, and all of us can relate to this poem.
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-07-04 06:25 PM


this is the best poem that i have read by you...it is so beautiful...arent you glad that god gave you that special person...when i think of the angel that god gave me it makes me smile...cuz without my boyfriend i dont know where i would be...he was there when i needed someone the most...and thats why i call him my angel...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

8 posted 2000-07-04 10:12 PM


Everyone-thank you all so much, you're way too nice!  I'm glad ya liked it.  Erin and Jose- yes, I am very very thankful that God sent my boyfriend to me.  He is such a wonderful person, I don't know where I would be now if he hadn't been with me.  Thanks so much for all your replies!!
Bel

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
9 posted 2000-07-05 03:26 AM


At least you know that all us guys aren't bad!!!  I'm sincerely glad to hear that you have that element in your life.  I wish I did right now.  I've got some friends that I never get to see because I've been forced into workaholism, but basically, I've been taking this big bad world of work, taxes, bills, and scrutiny on all alone.  You seem like a sweet, compassionate girl, so tell your boyfriend that I said he's a lucky guy.

Jeremy

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
10 posted 2007-12-01 08:04 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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