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And I Cry
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And I Cry |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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hey guys  Well here's my poor attempt at a song ...And I Cry You used to fill my heart's emtpy void you were everything i lived for You put the sparkle in my eyes You gave me reason to live, and so much more and i cry for the memories left behind and i cry because ure no longer mine ....and i cry for the moments that are forever lost where did my happiness go? I haven't smiled in weeks you still fill my thoughts and you're still the one my heart seeks and i cry for the memories left behind and i cry because ure no longer mine ....and i cry for the moments that are forever lost Why did you have to walk out of my life? i can still feel you on my heart's lonely descend The pain's more than i can take.. tell me, will my heart ever love again? and i cry for the memories left behind and i cry because you're no longer mine and i cry...... < !signature--> ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 12-27-2000).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
You should make more "poor attempts" 'cause this came out great. Live and let live. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
wut a wonderful song maybe i can make a melody to it, lol keep up the great wrk |
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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
Not a porr attempt at all. This sounds really good. Normally I would say something like, "with a little work.." but not this time, because all you need is a beat to go along with it and you're done! Great job! Sorry to hear what you had to go through though... God Bless, - tq_99 "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
sweets sweets sweets becca becca becca i think you shouldn't think of dancing for nsync anymore  i think you should write songs for em BRAVO!!!! if i could only throw you a bunch of roses i would...BRAVO!!!I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Every poem of yours that I have read has been so awsome including this one. This poem would truthfully make a great song and I know I'd listen to it. Keep up the great work I can't wait to read more of your poems! Lauren |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great attempt at a poor post... It was far from poor, I don't even think poor was in the vicinity when this was written... you have a wonderful talent, keep up th great work!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow! This is great, I'm impressed Bel |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
its amazing im very serious!i agrre u should make more "poor attempts" if they turn out like this!!maybe u should get a redocd deal Regina |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks guys Well i have the tune in my head when i sing it..but i cant play ANY musical instrument..so i guess im kinda SOL in that department. but i'll keep working on it Thanks again*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~ A poor attempt became a amazing job!!! Good work gilr!!! Keep it up... People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ERIN~ hey chic! Thanks for replying! Now I dont have to pout lol lol insider  Talk to u later girlie*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is great!! keep it up!! ~*Pixie*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is really good, I'm glad I read it. I had a little tune in my head when I read (ok, so I sang it in my head) it, but I'm sure it's totally different than what you have in your head for it. Anyway, I like it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey guys! thanks for replying, means alot as always! ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow, howd I miss this one. This was really touching! I say we hire you as lyricist as acire said. Bravo. ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks Jeremy Id LOVE to be hired to write songs*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a sad song......hope things get better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Can I PLEASE put this to music??? Please??? That is sooooo awesome. Poor attempt, huh...? ~*Skyfire *~Always Canadian*~ ~*~I used to be an idiot, but I'm all right now~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey go ahead and put it with music! i sure have no clue where to even start to do that...so go for it...then u can mail it to me *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Once I tried to write a song....it didn't work very well. But I would have to say you did an excellent job!! Keep it up!!! < !signature-->Luv Always, Priscilla ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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