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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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(Poem is about the seasonal change from winter to spring) Not sure how this came to me but I just felt the need to write about change, it's all I could think about. Enjoy. Though scenic tones of mild white do lay, Shots of citrus rays shall melt snow away, The earth’s mouth grows thirsty over time, Blades of grass shimmer color of dark lime, Birds aloft heads chant and collaborate, Of spring time they holler and await, The sun paints the sky with colors of blue, Upon the brush are violaceus blends of hue, Amidst the palette darks are not present-day, Leave that to somber storms to likely play, Frozen ponds no longer sew their tiny holes, ‘Cause the beating lights are fiery with coals, Naked trees soon dress in their vivid disguise, To conceal their bareness of winter cries, Those former inanimate oceans now a’ roar, Assaulting upon rocks that are never more, Dark shades of purple withdraw the tides, To the outlying horizon on all sky’s sides, Equinox of delight will dance into days, Limiting night and day in the same ways, When spring reaches it’s climax of change, Past days of frosty winter won’t be in range, As you look up into glassy finished skies, Spirits of melancholy will no longer rise Jeremy D. Raulinaitis 12/26 3pm < !signature--> "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 12-28-2000).] |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
wow...this is really beautiful! Change is a wonderful thing...if u take the time to appreciate it. I love this! God Bless and Keep Smiling  Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3 |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"As you look up into glassy finished skies, Spirits of melancholy will no longer rise" This is a beautiful poem, with wonderful imagery and an important message of hope. Thank you for sharing it with us. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Wonderful poem, Jeremy! Although it went right over my head, wonderful poem! I have a headache, so I'll read it again later, and maybe perhaps I'll understand better. But great! Allysa I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow Jermey! Is that beautiful or what?! This is definatly a keeper. I love it....you paint images so clear! Salma |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thank you very much. "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Jeremy, all the poems you write are beautiful and this is no exception.. whether I understand it correctly or not, I can see it's beauty!! Great Job and I look forward to seeing more!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Just beautiful Jeremy! Wonderful imagery, and a lovely flow to this piece, nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wonderful job of writing the poem  But I don't want winter to leave! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thanks everyone, any more replies til its gone? "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HOw you love nature jer.........keep it up  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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