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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
BLUCH. EWWWW. Deletion time... Vreni Prodigy Trim recollections are never satisfied, Depression’s hunger can’t be mollified. Brilliant hogwash appears on demand, Child’s soul imprisoned against their command. Reiterate the answers, spit it all back, Save our existence, caulk all the cracks. Hero of all, yet subhuman for the hour, The eyes see truth, but the mind does cower. Dance on cue, abstracted whipping boy, Amuse us for laughter, our little puppet toy. Observe this now, for this life you desired, You obtained your goal, but of it you tire. Epiphanized nirvana it is completely not, Despise your position, despite what you thought. Belated realization, can’t turn around now, Give up your efforts, you must learn how. [This message has been edited by peanogrl83 (edited 12-26-2000).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I love your flowing heartfelt words of wisdom. This poem was simply ingenious. "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i love your poems and you already know how much. i just don't like one line typed in the poem...i don't like this line: "BLUCH. EWWWW. Deletion time..." you know that talent is bestowed on you. not only you know this, but all of us do. and hey, sup with you and dopey  just kidding  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I'm gonna have to agree with acire on that one line. It just didn't fit the wonderful poem... ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized by someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
jeremy, acire, and Carly...thanks for replying ! Acire - you know that that is how I feel about my poetry so.....it's honest. Vreni |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
Wow... this is an amazing piece. You are very talented, and I love reading what you write. Very nice job! I would locve to read more by you, so keep them coming. Again, awesome job with this. *Jennifer |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
That may be how you feel about your poetry, but no one, and I say this with certainty, no one else here feels the same way about your poetry. You do know that it's good. You know that you have talent. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
You must have a HUGE vocabulary... I need the dictionary here... Wow!! It is an excellent piece... Well done!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
wow..the flow and i cannot even pick out the best qualities becasue ther eare so many!!! i loved this..it was great...keep writing.. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful poem Vreni..... And Acire.......Vreni is falling in love with me......isn't it obvious?!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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