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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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maybe All I ever wanted was to be different from every other girl through your eyes. I wanted to leave a piece of me with you. I wanted to matter and not be forgotten. I wanted to make you question yourself and what you didn't notice Maybe I failed or maybe you failed to see how special i truly am -=Ok well...it bugs me when I write poems that dont ryhme. i dont know why..just does. But so you know..whenever I write a poem that doesnt rhyme its because my emotions are so raw i cant even get it out on paper and think about it to make it ryhme. so i know its silly...but so u know  ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey peach...hey sweets!!! You know that a poem doesn't really have to rhyme. Look at E.B.B., she wrote that amazing poem and it doesnt really rhyme. Personally, I consider poems that don't rhyme as a step above rhyming ones. That's my opinion, and I hope that if someone reads this reply, they don't get offended. it's just an opinion. And in another opinion of mine  , you are getting better at your writing...keep it upI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hi there. This was a great poem. Usually the poems with 'raw emotion' seem to be the deeper and more interesting ones to read, like this one. Great job. ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized with someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey gurl!!!! What is up!?! I loved this poem...it bothers me sooo much too when my poems dont ryhme lol...but i really liked this one and i hope if he doesnt already, see how truely special you are!! Great poem hun...  muahz |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks guys ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks guys ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks guys ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
uggh sorry bout that ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Rhyming... what's that - just kidding - my poems rarely rhyme, you write well and I hope you keep up the great work! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem showed raw emotion. Just your unfiltered thoughts on paper.....nice one here. Hope all is well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
on top of agreeing with acire about your writing improving, i also feel that this poem was an emetional experience for you! jeremy r "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
that was a great post... doesn't matter if it doesn't rhyme... you gotta always have the mixture of those that do and those that don't.... very nice Salma |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks guys Merry Christmas everyone!!¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Merry Christmas folks!! This poem was very good... I never like to rhyme my poetry, I feel constricted through the framework. I like free verse, no specific rhyme scemes... and you see.... it has worked for you!! Good work, nice writing, keep 'em flowing. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
For some reason DQ I love poems that dont rhyme. But for some odd reason I could never write one that didnt rhyme. I like this one alot. I have noticed alot of good poetry up here today. Keep up the good work girl!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one a lot, it is written well, as usual! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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