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mikeykrazy
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0 posted 2000-12-20 09:17 PM


this poem i wrote last year when i lost the first love of my life i was 14 then and now i'm 15

why
why do we have to live
this life is just a show
many times I thought to give
and I thought I had to go

why must my love leave me
why must we be far apart
why does this make me grieve
and this will always breaks my hart

when she called me on the phone
we talked all through the night
when the news came it made me grown
I felt like getting in a fight

I went to school the next day
and I had a hard time
I had no friends in this new school it made my life a fray
no one to talk to I felt like a mime

why must she have mean friends
and why must they hate me
why must I have these wondering hands
it makes me want to hit a tree

the fact that we are in love means nothing
they keep on trying to break us apart
are hands and were always rubbing
she was the most beautiful thing like a piece of art


the way that her long hair cress  her neck
the way the water would drip off her nose
here innocent face when she smiled at me made me a wreck
and the first time that I saw her I just froze

her gleaming face from down the hall
I wanted to asked her out
when I went with her to the mall
and here voice knocked me about

but that is all over now
her voice on longer on the phone
I stop and think how
her brother says she is never home

how could this happen if we had love
we though the world would halt before this
but love is not for me and love is not a glove
it felt like hit in the stomach


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Alwye
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1 posted 2000-12-20 09:47 PM


Loosing someone you care about can be extremely rough indeed.  Great poetry here, welcome to Passions!   I hope to see much more from you!

*Krista Knutson*

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2 posted 2000-12-20 11:35 PM


Losing someone is tough. I hope all is well now. Anyway, welcome to Passions! I hope you enjoy your stay here along with the people. Adios!



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kimmy
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3 posted 2000-12-20 11:46 PM


welcome to passions..i liked your poem even though it was on a sad topic...i hope you like it here..
Ina
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4 posted 2000-12-21 12:29 PM


welcome to passions! your going to like it.
it sux u lost someone u love.all will be well.
Regina


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5 posted 2000-12-21 02:21 PM


Welcome, welcome! I'm sorry this has happened to you, but realize that you're still young, you have a long way to go, people will come and go. However, they are all in you life for a reason, and you never lose something for no purpose. Although it may be concealed now, one day you can see what that reason is. Good luck!
xoxo
Jenn


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keoni
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6 posted 2000-12-21 05:56 PM


Welcome to passions!It's so hard to lose someone, but I totally agree with Jenn,it all happens for a reason, even if it you can never figure it out, it happened for a reason
                                          Jon

katherine
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7 posted 2000-12-21 10:32 PM


this is a really good poem! it's sounds like it's written from the heart(ok that sounds really corney i know).

katherine

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8 posted 2000-12-22 12:03 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

This was a very good poem! It is so hard losing someone in your life, especially someone you care so much about or love..I'm sorry that you lost her...It was a great poem tho! Im looking forward to reading more!

Salooma
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9 posted 2000-12-22 04:51 PM


welcome to passions....
very nice but sad poem i believe.
i loved the flow of it, the words seemed to complete themselves.
great post

salma

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10 posted 2000-12-26 12:16 PM


Welcome to Passions
I'm glad you've joined our community and hope you stay to share your poetry for a long time.  You did a really good job on this first post, I'm looking forward to more!


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sweetstuff101
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11 posted 2000-12-26 03:53 PM


Great poem!! Wow that was awesome!! Losing someone you care deeply about is always hard. But time will eventually heal that wound, just keep her in your heart and never forget the fun you had. Well you did a great job. Keep writing!!

Much Luv,
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Tears of Glass
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12 posted 2000-12-26 04:58 PM


Hey!  Welcome to Passions!  Great poem to kick off your stay with us    Awesome poem, I really liked it!  It showed the hardships you're enduring.. and that's never easy to lose someone you love.  Again, welcome, and nice job.

*Jennifer

Melster
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13 posted 2000-12-27 12:37 PM


Great Poem...  welcome to passions...  you are sure to fit right in...  I don't know how this one got soo far without me seeing it...  but I am glad it didn't get too much further, I may have missed it...  great job!!  The hardship will soon be over!!

Melz!!


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Wicced_Witch
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14 posted 2000-12-27 01:09 AM


Welcome to Passions!!  Great poem.  Reminded me of when my dad got new orders and I had to move and leave my boyfriend.  You're lucky, you're still young.  Keep up the good work.

~Steph~

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