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BaByGuRL Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 13 |
I thought i would stop loving you I thought that i would just forget but now when i think of us i look back with sorrow and regret i thought we were just beginning how was i supposed to know that the end would come so soon? I truly believed it and felt it in my heart that we would be together for ever until death do us part but now i only have one wish that i could just forget about the past it seems to me that is what you have done and somehow i found out last i will admit that i want you to want me but in reality i wont be that lucky again so i wish the past wouldnt haunt me |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice simple words expressing yourself adequately, good one! you may try something like "Hopeless Romantic" or "Before and After." jeremy r < !signature--> "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 12-17-2000).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem - I can relate to what you are saying - you can work things out and trust me - someone else will come along! As for the title - I can't help there as I don't know how I come up with my titles! I look forward to hearing more from you!! Melz!! |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
I don't know about the title. How about The Last To Know? or To let go. Well, I'm really bad at this myself so not much help there. Great poems though. apsara |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed yourself well in this BabyGurl ... it's so difficult to let go of love, when the memories are still so vivid. Nicely written.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I'm terriblt with titles hun so can't help ya there....but I do think this is a GREAT one, probably one of your best. Could it be about anyone in particular? A salamander, perhaps??? lol you'll get through this. Love ya always Ur big sis ~K~ PS - I gave Jonny to Maureen today...it was hard - I wanted to keep him  ~*Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... without your smile.~* ~*If I never said I'm sorry, then I'm wrong, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I surely hope that things get better with you! Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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BaByGuRL Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 13 |
Yeak K this was about a certain aquatic animal lol...you know me and salemanders! haha wow everyone reading this must think me and k are psycho...but anyways inside joke...thanks for all your replies! ~BaByGuRL |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a good job of expressing your feelings here, nice writing! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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