These Tears I Only Reveal To You

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Teen Poetry #3

These Tears I Only Reveal To You

TrueLUV
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since 2000-07-19

Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.

0 posted 2000-12-16 03:51 PM

When we started you told me that you would share your all with me

My lady you said that you would never hold a thing from me

Now you tell me that it is over with no reason except a tear in your eye

As you walked away I tried to stop you revealing my tears to your heart

You smiled at me and said that I was too nice, and that she would always Love me

I gave you my heart, soul , and me
You gave me your love, care , and your heart
One thing you couldn't give me was your inner core
A soul of emotions waiting to get out you could not give to me

You were scared you said and I loved you till this day.

a_little_girl
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since 2000-05-08

Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA

1 posted 2000-12-16 06:14 PM

Wow...stirringly beautifully simple message. I really liked it.
--Little Girl

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2000-12-17 11:43 AM

I really like this poem, you did a great job of writing it!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Melster
Member

since 2000-12-09

Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia

3 posted 2000-12-17 06:37 PM

Thank you - you have done a good job, I know how this feels... and you have done a GREAT job explaining it!

Melz!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2000-12-17 09:01 PM

this was great! i really like how you depicted your angst and heart break. good job on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

5 posted 2000-12-18 03:45 AM

so so sad! i'm neally in tears.

apsara
Member

since 2000-11-09

Posts 70

6 posted 2000-12-18 03:51 AM

this is really sad. The last line really caught me right there.

You were scared you said and I loved you till this day.

Loved it. Great job.

apsara

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