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Yankee10n20BFF Junior Member
since 2000-11-02
Posts 27T-Town, AL |
OK, I know that this title is over used and all but I just thought it fit this peom! "You" I love you so much I just wish I could tell you Every time I talk to you on the phone I get butterflies in my stomach Whenever we make eye contact It's as though we are thinking the same thoughts Whenever we are alone It's as though the rest of the world doesn't exist Whenever we are close We look at each other and get closer But sometimes I'm confused about our friendship I don't know if you want more When we are alone you act like you do I just want to hold you And tell you how much you mean to me I pray every day that we get together The one thing holding me back Is the possibility of losing our friendship I would die if that happened But if we were together I would never treat you bad You are and will always be the one love in my life Whether you know it or not I just wish I could show you. No matter what you are going through, all you have to do is close your eyes and dream cause no one can take them away from you. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was so sweet. Tons of raw emotion in this one. A beautiful poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful expression Yankee ... powerful emotions in this piece, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Nice job on this one. It's well written and full of emotion. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great poem. Like Lakewalker said, tons of raw emotion. If you love her I say tell her, if she is a really good friend, then nothing should change, just my opinion though. Jon |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is a really beautiful poem! you should go for it and tell them how you feel. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think Jon got a little confused up there but I'll say it now: tons of raw emotion. This is the type of poem that I'm sure lots of people can relate to, thanks for sharing it! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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