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My Silent Heart (really short)
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My Silent Heart (really short) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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Title is weak... Suggestions welcome < !signature-->~My silent heart~ Searching for the voice of my heart Hating my mind for all it's greed Looking for what's pure to impart Knowing that love is all that I need Note: not sure if impart is the right word. I used it to mean share. I think it can mean that... I don't know. If it dosn't make sense sorry. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 12-16-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think the title is good. From http://www.dictionary.com : "im·part: To grant a share of; bestow: impart a subtle flavor; impart some advice. To make known; disclose: persuaded to impart the secret." So I think using impart makes sense. Nice job on the poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
unfound love? well good short poem. lakey was trying to um i dont know confuse me o oops did i spell that wrong sorry jk lol good poem "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great........short but sweet and simply meet.........uhhh erm......ok yea but great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
ISGona: Good Job! You expressed a silent heart very well. Don't think the title is weak but, thats just my opinon. Short, simple, and to the point (thats nice sometimes) I think you used the word correctly. Now I've read one of your poems. Glad I got the chance. Take care~Lisa~ ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Lake ~ as always thanks Branden ~ Unfound love is fitting... thanks Dopey ~ Meet? err yea I guess(?) thanks Lisa ~ thanks. appreciate the comments. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Wow yo, I really liked it. Tons. Tootelz. ~Carly |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
that was pretty cool. i love short poems, they're always direct and u can figure out what the meaning is. great poem Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Carly ~ Thx. your to kind Curly ~ Thx. I'm glad you like short poems 'cause that's all I seem to be able to write lately "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this poem was breviloquent, at the same time it didnt inhibit any meaning. jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Jeremy ~ Thanks for reading my poem and the kind words. ps Is "breviloquent" a word? You could have just said "breif" now my head hurts. *takes an asprin* hehe< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 12-16-2000).] |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
I LOVE THIS!!! this post is so great! it gets right to the point but is so powerful even in its few words keep it up!!~*Pixie*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
hey! That was awesome! I really liked it! Thanx for sharing!! Keep writing!! Luv, ~*~Priscilla~*~ ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Pixie & Priscilla ~ Thank you both for your generous words. I'm glad you took the time to read my poem IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
I like this one. Its short but it says a lot. Its just powerful that way. Great poem. apsara |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very sweet poem here... In the few words you have written this poem speaks volumes... Great write... coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-19-2000).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Thank you both ~ I am very pleased that you read my poem and took the time to reply. Thanls again IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww Jay. You'll find her one day. Who knows, perhaps you know her already.  Loved it as usual!! Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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