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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
Just out of reach Grasping for the edge Slipping slowly Lost grip Let go Falling Falling with arms swinging Grabbing for anything Tumbling quickly Loud scream Let go Stopping Stopping completely to a halt Flashing life before eyes Breathing hardly Held death Let go Deleted. |
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Hallie_Angel Member
since 2000-12-06
Posts 102 |
Hey, That poem was very expressive. But please don't let go!!! Catherine! |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This poem was really unique...I loved the style...don't worry things will get better. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very expressive indeed. I'm sorry if this is currently how you are feeling.  Things can and will get better, keep your head up.xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This was Awsome... I love how the verses form arrows pointing down... Very creative. Thanks for Sharing I loved it IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Expressive yes Creative yes Good yes  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This format was sooo unique..i loved it! And the poem itself was excellent...it expressed your feelings wonderfully! Great job  |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
This is really amazing. I hope you DO hang on, because life is REALLY wonderful. Just think, how many more poems you have to write! Don't worry, Jesus is always there to listen, comfort, and care! You are a very talented writer. God Bless and Keep Smiling Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3 |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the impact this had due to the style, excellent job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
thanx guys for all of your support..but dont worry i have no intentions of letting go..thank you...im glad you all enjoyed it.. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice representation in this peice, i liked the style jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is really good. i see your own unique style in writing and it is really good. wow!!! what else can i say. thanks for sharing  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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