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Pickering8 Junior Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 10Redlands California |
You start to touch my skin, The sensation rushes from within, The hairs on the back of my neck, Stand, as my senses become a wreck, The only thing I know, Is I shouldn’t let you go, I want to stay entwined, Until the world has left us behind, Just you and I, Until the day turns into a night sky, Next our lips meet, You nearly knock me off my feet, With sensations so strong, I know I could do no wrong, I’ve lost all sense of time, This has become sublime, My mind is so clear, Letting you go is my only fear, As we pull away, My thoughts never stray, I just want to touch your lips, If not with mine, then at least with my finger tips, Touching yours, we are back holding hands, We both know there are no plans, I may not have voiced my feelings avowed, To a large crowd, But that is the least of my concerns, The most is, how this returns. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Pickering! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. This is a wonderful first post ... very beautiful style and sentiments, nicely done! I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hello there!! Welcome!!  This was such a magnificent poem. I loved the way it was written, I can almost see you writing this with that that-was-great grin on your face. Keep writing!!~Carly |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Excellent job on your first post here, you've made quite an entrance. I hope you enjoy it here and I look forward to reading more of your poems "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 12-12-2000).] |
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Pickering8 Junior Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 10Redlands California |
Thank you for your replies. I'll try to get around to posting more. Your encouragement really helps right now, when I am questioning my writing ability. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Good, very good. Welcome to our crazy- mixed up home!!! Join our circle of friends... head on over and check out the snowball fight!!! You write very well, and this experience of which you speak sounds wonderful!xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Hey there Pickering! Excellent poem!! You write very well and i hope to read more from you!! Thanks for sharing, it brought a smile to my face. And of course I can't forget -- Welcome to the Family! ~packs an extra snowball... *grin*~ *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! A wonderful first post and I surely do hope to see you post more around here!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Pickering8 Junior Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 10Redlands California |
Once agian thank you, I started doubting myself after an English teacher ripped this one a part(it was the first time I turn in a poem to a teacher in over four years.) I have to say in the two days that I have been here, I seen wonderful and passionate poems, keep up the good work all of you. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
your poem is beautiful |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
welcome to passions...i loved this first post..it was great..keep on writing.. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! I loved this first post...you described how you feel when your with that person so nicely!! This was a great first post and i cant wait to see more from you!!! Welcome again!! |
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