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Teen Poetry #3

When i close my eyes

Andrea4writes
Junior Member

since 2000-12-03

Posts 31
Fayetteville, NC USA

0 posted 2000-12-08 07:26 PM

When I close my eyes, you're all I see
vividly painted on a canvas in my mind.
I see your hair and your eyes,
a deep gray, blue,
your smile represents the youth in your heart.
I hear your voice,
so soft and warm,
I feel your touch
that I have dreamed of for so long.
I feel the love I have for you
and I see the space in your heart
where I should be.
When I open my eyes I realize,
that it's all in my mind.

<3Andrea ~luvs~ Anthony,<3

You only live once so live it to the fullest..
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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2000-12-08 09:48 PM

This was great and a twist at the end. Great read.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2000-12-09 09:19 AM

Very nicely done Andrea ... I too liked the surprise of this being a "fantasy" at the end ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-12-09 01:53 PM

Hey,
Nice job on this one, it's really good.

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