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sorrowfulangel
Member

since 2000-06-29

Posts 59
Memphis,TN

0 posted 2000-07-01 04:19 AM

softly,raindrops tap against my window
the gentlest of lullabyes making me feel dimmer
farther away
a sky so dark even the luminious moon was drowned
beneath it's sable coat of clouds
with eyes to the heavens,i search through it's depth
the trace of a smile playing on my lips
for i have learned
that after every raging storm
a rainbow is sure to dawn

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

1 posted 2000-07-01 04:24 AM

a truely wonderful poem i like the last two lines where you talk about after a storm theres always a rainbow loved it much so please don't give up writing cause i long to read more from you.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2000-07-01 04:50 AM

I'd really like to vote for this poem, but I need still to figure out how...if somehow can help me out there, I will. The vocabulary and descriptive qualities you showed in this piece really give me an idea of the potential you have to amaze us all. JUST DON'T GO AND SHOW ME UP!!!!! J/K.

Jeremy D. Halstead

cutie2005
Member

since 2000-04-30

Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA

3 posted 2000-07-01 10:57 AM

this was a great poem.. i love it! Keep writing you are wonderful!

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

4 posted 2000-07-01 11:01 AM

That was a beautiful poem. I would love to read more by you in the future. Hope that enjoy writing the poem as well as reading others. I also liked the last two lines.

Chel

DJLI
Member

since 2000-06-21

Posts 237
TN, USA

5 posted 2000-07-06 12:11 PM

even though theres always a rainbow, doesn't mean the storm isn't something to enjoy seeing...love ya my Queen.

if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.

BabyGirl1
Member

since 2000-07-02

Posts 91
Morris, IL

6 posted 2000-07-06 12:42 PM

This was a wonderful poem! Your writing is so elequent. I really enjoy reading your work. Keep them comming!

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

7 posted 2000-07-06 02:03 AM

well what can i say...this is not the last poem that i will ever read by you...this poem is beautiful...but you know the best part of a storm is getting to see the rainbow...at least thats what i think...you really should submit it for the book...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2000-07-06 07:35 AM

This is absolutely lovely SorrowfulAngel, and so full of imagery! What a beautiful message this contains ... wonderful writing!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-12-01 10:28 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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