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jytree
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0 posted 2000-12-04 12:07 PM


Little things swirling around in my head,
Vocies trying to make me belive that I'm already dead,
But thinking to myself "This cannot be",
For all of this love makes me free,

Oh girl I know i've done some crazy stuff in the past,
But I think i'm ready to make our love last,
But of course you prove me wrong,
So Another heartbreak,
Thus another song,

Girl I pray to the powers that be,
But then just like that you simply say it's not meant to be,
All she demand is that I leave it be,
So all I can do now is set her free,

So now as I walk away,
She would have the nerve to say we can still be friend!.

What did I do wrong to be curse with this fate,
MY only last thought is God Please let this be my last date!.
SO now with tears in my eyes,
I attempt to say Goodbye,
But Before I do she turn her back walks away,
And so thus we are thru.
But A phone call two days later cheers me up
I found out she does this to all men,
I thought I was smart I didn't have a clue,
But the happy part is Someone put drugs in her pop.
So now she is in jail because of the cops.


Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born



© Copyright 2000 Michael Jay vaughn - All Rights Reserved
XTC_AngeL
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1 posted 2000-12-04 04:16 PM


Hey, this is worded so powerfully!! I know exactly how you feel as it happens to me all the time!! The way you have expressed your thoughts and feelings over the whole situation is done well and brilliantly!! I loved this! Keep it up!!

¤XTC AngeL¤


jytree
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2 posted 2000-12-04 04:36 PM


to tell the truth only half of that poem really happned I made up the part about her going to jail I would still feel sad for her even after all the crap I went through.
But thank you for replying

Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


Greeneyes617
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3 posted 2000-12-04 04:50 PM


How about hateful love or something like that?
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4 posted 2000-12-06 03:50 PM


I thought this was a nice poem jytree. Glad you made up the other half cuz i was about to sayy......hehe....
good job and keep posting!



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Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-12-06 03:55 PM


I have no clue for a title but I think you did a good jov on this

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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chic
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6 posted 2000-12-07 01:09 PM


Great poem Jay.  And as for a title how about... Fated Love?  I dunno it just popped up

love,
chic

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

jytree
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7 posted 2000-12-08 10:22 AM


I warned you all before I have I unusally sense of humor so !

Love is pure in it's top form,
But with out romance love is not born


Lakewalker
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8 posted 2000-12-08 04:51 PM


I just realized I put good jov.  Of course I meant job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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