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Open Up Your Eyes
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Open Up Your Eyes |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A 
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Open Up Your Eyes Every moment without the one that makes your heart erupt makes you want to close your eyes because you can see him when they're shut. In the blackness, there he is like the clearest summer sky. But everytime, he dissapears when you open up your eyes. Sad it is, but never fear help is on the way. I'll do my best to help you through each and everyday. So when your crying on your knees and you just can't see the sky; you need a friend who sees the way... just open up your eyes. Jeremy D. Halstead 11/99 |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well you keep racking up my votes your a great writer in many ways and i hope that you use the idea in this poem many times with your friends. keep them coming man love to read more. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
i think it was very well written,someone can only wish to have someone there for them like that |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
This poem was very well written and I hope that you become a writer one day. I want to read some more of your poems. You won my vote. Chel |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jeremy~well, you always have a little way of stopping my heart with each and every word you write (or in this case type) you always seem to know just what to say to capture my heart!! Just keep it up ok? Love Always~*~Pryncess Jess~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful poem. It's wonderful to have friends that are willing to show you the way... "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Jer, As alwayz, love it! I may be able to sing, but I stand in your shadow when it comes to poetry. Keep it up! TAP2 |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well what can i say about this??? it is BEAUTIFUL...we all have that friend that will be your friend for a lifetime...and i think that i have finally figured out who my angel was...actually there are 2...but god gave them to me for a reason and hopefully i will figure out why they are there for me...i really do hope that this poem makes it in the book...you have my vote!!! ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
oops sorry i accidently made a mistake by pressing the button twice!!!font>< !signature--> ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 07-02-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there, I was just looking through some old stuff and found this...I loved every part of it...so new people better read this...cuz it's amazing... The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey  This was great...i just love the title lol dont get me wrong the poem's awesome! but the title really is what drew my attention. well done :0~!*Kiley< !signature--> "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 10-28-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this one is really well done. It expresses such a clear idea, I like it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a very sweet poem. I liked it a lot.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
This was well written. Nice flow, nice style, nice message. Great job! Vreni |
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SweetAngel New Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 2 |
I really liked this poem, it almost made me cry. Keep up the good work. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem was absolutely beautiful...i cant say enough about it! So sweet =o) Your an excellent writer...keep up the good work!! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
every word in the dictionary has been used to describe you and your writing so Ive got nothing to say but "fantastical". jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is really good...keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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