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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 2000-11-30 09:21 PM



Who sees the children's tears?
Disreagard those famine commericals, for they are
FaKe
Tell me, who is fake?
Is it the WaLkInG sKeLeToNs,
The pile of BoNeS a mother holds?
SiLeNcE seems to be our reply.
TrUtH is, SiLeNcE kills.
Alas, wE are the FaKe ones.
With our internet and Treadmills,
We roam the pages of our
Neiman Marcus catalogs.  
Our idea of making the world a
bEtTeR pLaCe
Is to simply smile at a stranger.
Do you smile at those
WaLkInG sKeLeToNs?
"Tis not the fault of America!" you claim.
You seek to place the blame on...WhO?
That's right, blame it on the
WaLkInG sKeLeToNs
And the pile of BoNeS a mother holds.
Do you dare to see the children's tears?

© Copyright 2000 Carly Anne Van Dort - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-30 11:01 PM


I think this is weird haha like you said. But i did like it and the message is great. Keep it up! You know you da man.....erm...woman!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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2 posted 2000-12-01 12:41 PM


I was wondering if you were going to post this poem or not.  I'm glad you did.  Like dopey says it has a great message.
IsGona

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I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN
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3 posted 2000-12-01 09:45 PM


This is a very thought-provoking piece, especally at this time of the year. Thank you for reminding us of the unfortunate ones. Keep up the good work!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
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4 posted 2000-12-02 02:00 AM



WOW...this is an extremely powerful piece!
This is a very important subject that too
many people don't take seriously enough,
and you've done a wonderful job of bringing it to life.
Incredible write!!!

*smiles*,
~vicky





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heart, you have not truely met the poet."
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Child of the Stars
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5 posted 2000-12-02 03:21 PM



  Thanks you guys for reading this.  It is an extremely important subject to me, one that has touched me in ways not imaginable by others. Just seeing the pictures of children who are literally walking skeletons force me to break down in tears. I jsut hope that maybe other people will come to realize how much they really have..I know it's something I have to work on...well thank you again for reading. It means so much..

  ~Carly

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6 posted 2000-12-03 11:17 AM


Hey, great job of getting this message out.  I think we all need to be a lot more thankful for the things we have.  And we should try to help others too.  Nice job on the poem!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-03-29 01:01 PM



*silently hits the library button*

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