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Down and Out |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: This is one of my songs. yep yep Down and Out: Are you lost in space? Eating out the future of all your worth. So we're down and out, But that doesn't mean your gone. We see what we'll never be. Lost at sea We see death tranquility. Crashing down on me. I flee From the us, the we. So you're lost in space? Running from the past of all that was. So we're down and out. Down and out and out. Nothing x2 is all I got. Nothing x2 is why I rot. We see what we'll never be. Lost at sea We see death tranquility. Crashing down on me. I flee From the us, the we. I'm not wasting away. What a lie, I'd say. Eating out the future of all i'm worth. We're down and out, But i'm gone.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
.....blew me away..........can't wait to hear this on the radio..... ~Carly Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid. |
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Rhiannon Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95Fayetteville, TN USA |
I liked this one! You write such sweet responses to my poetry that it's hard to compensate  but i do enjoy reading you.love leslie The night is my companion The solitude my guide Would I spend forever here And not be satisfied? Sarah MacLachlan, "Possession" |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I'm with the others. This was great. This really had a nice rhythm to it. I like what you are saying in this song too. As always I look forward to your next post IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey dopey are u in a band? I mean if you took this farther down the road and actually did something about it then you mite be famous someday and i'll be able to say Hey, i know that guy lol i love the poem/song keep up the great work like always "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is very good Dopey, very very good I'd say. You have a real talent. Great rhythm, great style...keep it up Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
great work i haven;t been in the forum much lately but i love this talk to ya later~*Pixie*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Dopey, hey, this is awesome. I think it sounds great, you really have a lot of talent. I'm gonna add this to my library thing. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Dopey, this was a very fine piece of work here - it will make an INCREDIBLE song. Bravo!! :.) Vreni |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
due to my lack of time to write anything creative and insightful i'll just say....nice job! Swift as a shadow, short as any dream; Brief as the lightning in the collied night, That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth, And ere a ma |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well thanks everybody. If you all wondered......yes i play guitar and in the process of forming a band. So yea.......most of these songs will come into play.....when?....Probably in 20 billion years when i find a damn drummer! haha....bye! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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