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Forever in a Moment |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
a picture perfect taken a moment stilled in time a night never to be forgotten emotion preserved in mind forgotten through the years turned yellow on the edge stacked away in boxes once lost along the ledge a love promised forever died within a year a desire once uncontrollable lost without a tear a night up in the attic the boxes all unpacked revealed a night to remember piled among the stacks a night full of passion sealed within a flash rekindled an ended love and renewed a love to last a picture perfect taken a moment stilled in mind a night never to be forgotten a love outlasting time "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked the ending in this one. Keep it up cuz this was great!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DreamerGrl27 Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 142 |
This was really good...I loved it...I loved this part soooooo much: a night full of passion sealed within a flash rekindled an ended love and renewed a love to last Again...this was really really good. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's amazing how one moment can change a person's entire life. It's even more profound when that moment is captured on film. You describe this beautifully. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem was GGGGRRRRRREEEEEAAAAAAATTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!! I absolutely loved it!!! Omg it had so much truth in it and it flowed so nicely...i really liked this one a lot!! One of my favs!! Thanks for sharing!!!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
CareBear- WOW...this is really good...  you have a wonderful talent, and I can't wait to read more from you.. This one is absolutely beautiful.. *smiles*, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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B@BYG!RL Junior Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 19Australia |
My favorite poem so far! To be able to write like this.. a dream of mine.. Thanx for sharing your poem. ~Dianne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CareBear~ How perfect is the moment captured in your rhyme Of a very special photograph lasting through all time Time marches on until the camera commands HALT ! Then time stands still forevermore kept within the heart's vault Commanding memories to come with thoughts so kind when exploring the photographs stored our minds *This was such a lovely and nostalgic look at an exploration in the attic. Lovely, sweet poet. Thanks for the inspiration ! Keep penning these beauties ! *And thank you, Vicky ... you knew I'd like this one ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
That was so deep! i loved it, it rocks! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I have to thank Vicky, too. This is lovely, very well put together, and shows a lot of wisdom. A lot of what we think is going to be forever really isn't, but then again... you never know, do you?To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a great job with the flow of this. I really like this poem, it's very good I think I'm going to put it in my private library. nice job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Ha, that's just like me, I forgot to put it in my library "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I like this! great job! |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
Thank you all for the support! This means so much to me! : ) thanks again! "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Can't believe I'm just now reading this one. I would have really missed out on a good poem. Thank you for sharing IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
let me pick my jaw off the floor first before i say anything...... I'm speechless...BRAVO I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Job, I really like this one, you have done such a wonderful job expressing this feeling!! keep up the great work!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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