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So Hard To Tell You
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So Hard To Tell You |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
When we first started talking I felt at peace with you Now that we began to proceed into something more I dont't know how to tell you that I care Now I dont't know how to tell you that I feel something for you Without doubting myself that you would not have the mutual feelings You asked something of me that no girl ever did and that drew my attention more to you and your heart I just hope that when I do tell you how I feel you won't break my heart and take my soul You make me feel so different that I can't explain my desire for you You make me feel that if I were with you I would be called "Lucky". You make me feel asthough I were in some other place with you, and it was just us two. When I tell you I hope you don't say no tonight When I tell you I hope you don't break my heart When I tell you I hope you don't steal the last ounce of my soul I hope you can see that I want you for more than the way you freak me More than moving it up, and down, left, and right, in, and out, more than working me like a real freak should. Luv U >N+K |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
You never know how she feels about you...I suggest that you give her the poem...I doesnt hurt to try...I dont know if you want to do that though...But its just a suggestion... People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Interesting poem, I think it's good. It really expresses how you feel. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
You know... I was totally getting you, completely feeling the vibes on this one, right until the end. Those last couple of lines... referring to things of a sexual nature?? I'm not sure I understand. Well, regardless, I hope this girl gives you the response you desire, we all deserve some happiness. xoxo Jenn |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree with Jenn. I thought the poem was extremely good, but the last two lines seem out of place. But if you truly want to know, ask. It's better to know than to spend your life wondering. Jon |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hmmmmmm......the ending confused me. "Freak me"........what's that? I'm puerto rican.....is that some sort of slang term?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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