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Trying the Chains
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Trying the Chains |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
(i haven't posted in a while and i don't expect a huge reply but i just wanna share w/everyone!!) So many chains holding me down if i break them will i be free? or will i be left behind unknowing left behind to wait and see. Not knowing what lies ahead i use my strength and break out not wanting to stay in this hell i escape only to be in doubt. Self-inflicted wounds i leave but they do not matter now for i am free to fly away from those chains i was tied to and bound. Now i fly out of this raging place up away i climb into the sky i don't know if i am completely free but i do know that i gave it a try. ~*Always make time to stop and taste the pop tarts*~ |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
OOOOOOOOH!!! This is BE-OO-TI-FUL!!!!!! I love this one too hun! You rock  [This message has been edited by Suga_Baby (edited 11-27-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I really enjoyed this, it was written with a certain...pizzaz... heh...well I loved it, great work. ~Carly |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Very nice, very well written...keep it up |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Freedom and safety can't always co-exist, but freedom is always worth the risks. You describe this well. Thanks for posting! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is a nice piece. I especially enjoyed the last two lines: "i don't know if i am completely free but i do know that i gave it a try." Keep up the good work Jon |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think you did a really good job on this poem, keeping posting for us now "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This was great. I hope you continue to post "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a really great poem..i hope to read more.. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i think this poem is amazing. I love how you got hurt from escaping and freeing yourself from the chains and you didn't care cuz you were free........and hell, maybe you didn't make it but you tried. I hope you made it though......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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