»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #3
»
Just Once...
| Teen Poetry #3 |
|
Just Once... |
|
|
silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
This is one of 3 poems I wrote last night.. all about a certain guy. Let's just say the situation kinda sucks in my direction. *sigh* but oh well... (i'll probably end up posting the others as well) --------------- "Just once..." look at you your perfect smile it goes with your perfect laugh and your (edited by moderator) perfect eyes leading me to know you’d never tell me lies. I hate you your strong arms they wrap and comfort so well and your hands, lost in my own reminding me that i’ll never be alone. I beg please hurt me just once take my heart and tear it out tell me things I pray aren’t true then just maybe I could stop loving you. < !signature--> with the unknown comes no expectations in this i find my peace [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 11-26-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 silvrduck - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
silvrduck- First of all, let me give you a belated 'welcome' to Passions.  We're so glad you've decided to join us in our 'family of friends'. You've done a good job of expressing your feelings in this piece, and I hope to read lots more from you in the future. I do need to make you aware, however, that profanity is not acceptable here in the Passions forums. We have some very young readers here, and we don't want them, or any of us, to be subjected to offensive language. I have edited out the inappropriate word in the above post, and will very much appreciate your understanding and cooperation.. Again, welcome, and we look forward to seeing lots more from you. *smiles*, -vicky < !signature--> "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 11-26-2000).] |
||
|
Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
I liked this poem. It's like this guy loves you and he's just perfect for you and you love him so much, but maybe you're not used to feeling this way and you want him to stop. Is that what you were trying to get at in this poem? Sorry if I mistunderstood it, but it was a great poem. ~Writing is filling up your soul with words~ --Me |
||
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great i really liked it, but i surely hope that he doesnt hurt you. You'll be sorrrrrrrrrrry  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
||
|
silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Oops, so sorry about that offensive word there! I'll make sure to catch myself next time.. You were pretty close Nikkisweet.. it's actually about this guy who is perfect for me, and who I do love so much... but because of something (err, someone) we can never be more than friends. So in a way I "hate" him because I'm not suppose to love him, but he makes it impossible not to. Does that make any sense? lol Anyways.. thanks for the compliments you guys!! they mean alot to me.  with the unknown comes no expectations in this i find my peace |
||
|
Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yes, that makes sense. The poem is really good, it expresses that feeling well. Good job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
||
|
Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
If its for a good reason that you dont want to be with him then dont. But if its cause of something little then dont let it bother you. You cant help the way you feel and nobody besides you can change it. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
||
|
Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow...I realllly loved this poem...mind if I print it out? I can totally relate to it, but in a little bit of a different way then what you meant it to be. I'm "in love" with a guy who has hurt me but it isn't his fault so I can't blame him or be mad at him for it no matter how much I wish I could just hate him. Sooo anyways, this was awesome. Definitely a must-read. Keep it up. And ur relatively new here I see so welcome Love Kristin ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... w |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
