Teen Poetry #3 |
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The world above.. |
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vix616 Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 22 |
The World Above Everyday I stare at the sky Don't bother asking I don't know why Maybe it's because i've nothing to da But then again Maybe that's not true Whatever it is, i don't care Just as long As it's still there.. |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
This was really good. Short but sweet. Sometimes we wonder what's past the sky or maybe we look at because it's just so pretty and we are in a trance...you never know.. ~Writing is filling up your soul with words~ --Me |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the style of this one. The beginning was great and so was the end, and the middle too. Nice job ![]() "Just as long As it's still there.." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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vix616 Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 22 |
Thanx for your replies Nikki - yes, i suposse we do wonder what a beyond the sky - gives me an idea for another poem! Lakewalker - thanx for your compliments, i must say that when i read it back i quite liked the end aswell. I never go back and change my poems though even if i didn't like it, i believe that what you write first is how you really feel.. ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yea........just as long as it's there we'll all be fine. If it's not there.......OMG RUN!!!!!! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
GEEZ!!! This is really good. Short but excellent. It's got like hidden meanings to it. well done vix616. wel done. thanks for the share I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I really liked this. Great job ![]() ~Carly |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
The simple wonders of clouds...all summed up into one beautiful poem...well done. ![]() --Little Girl |
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