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An Un-Perfect Picture |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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~*~An Un~Perfect Picture~*~ If I painted a picture, what do you think you'd see? Would you see someone else, or would you see me? Would the person be happy, or someone being sad? Should it be a smile, or maybe someone going mad? Would there be a grin, painted across the face? But there could be, just an empty space. Why dont you, paint a picture of me. And tell me what it is, that you really see. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 11-21-2000).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
ERIN- this is really beautiful..  very well-written...and a thought-provoking piece. enjoyed it much. *smiles*, -vicky btw...I went ahead and locked the thread that you edited the poem out of so everyone would know which one contained the poem. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Erin, this is beautiful! I really like it! I find myself asking questions similar to these. (espically with Justin) Have a nice day! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was great, I'm glad I read it. It's all bout things I think about too...thanks for putting all this into words ~Carly |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Nice poem I like your picture too!! ~*~Minna~*~ If I could walk I'd be glad..But I'm glad the way I am- ~*~me~*~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey chick~ Hey i was wonderin how you get your font to be bigger when you post all your poems? I can't seem to figure it out. Oh and im working on getting my picture posted. "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow erin....great poem and beautiful words that you've painted! i'm trying to get back here.....i missed so much! Salma |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Very nice poem Erin. It sounds sort of familiar. Have you posted this before. I can't quite figure out. any who... I really like it. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thank you all for taking the time out to read my poem and reply. It really means alot to me. And yeah Isgona I posted this one before. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Hey girl, long time no post in here for me! Great poem. I've often wondered myself exactly how other poeple saw me. It looks like I'll be hanging out in here a little more since things are pretty much dead in PITS. Anyway, later! jason  I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
girl, the picture I could paint would be worth a thousa...NO a millions words. you are one amazing person and I admire what you are able to do. You have tought me a lot...and I won't ever forget that. Thanks girl, for bein such a great person and understanding it all. you're great!~*~JeLLo~*~< !signature--> *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 11-22-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, I think this one is done really well, it's so good! What an interesting idea, looking at pictures, seeing how others see you. Nice job! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow Erin!! This one's very good. Now I get to put a picture to the name that writes all the poems. This is a really cool poem, kudos! xoxo Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i love this Erin. sorry it took me a while to reply to it. I would like to paint that picture of you if you don't mind. it would probably be a smiley face with angel wings and a halo. You have this ability to make people comfortable when you talking to them. Not only that, you always seem to put smiles on everyones faces. At least you always do on mine  . see there's a big smile for ya hey, there's another one I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is a good point...i wonder what people would see me as if they painted a picture of me...i actually wonder if each person sees me differently...thats a very strange thing to think about...anywayz...really really good poem..i like this one a lot. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I didnt expect this many replies but thank you all for reading my poem and replying to it. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was really good! I liked it alot. Keep writing, I look forward to reading more from you soon. Much Love, sweetstuff< !signature--> ~*~GoOd fRiEnDz ArE hArD 2 FiNd, HaRdEr 2 LeAvE, & iMpOsSiBlE 2 fOrGeT~*~tHe HaRdEsT tHiNg tO Do iS wAtCh tHe 1 U LuV, lUv sUm1 eLsE~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 11-24-2000).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi there i liked the sentiments here...Wonderfully expressed  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Another wonderful poem Erin! Keep it up! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks sweetstuff, Kaile, and Dopey for your replies. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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