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tq_99
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0 posted 2000-11-19 05:15 PM


I wrote this poem in reflection with a situation that I am going through right now, and that I would ask your prayers for:


I'm Sorry

I'm sorry I never gave you a chance
I'm I never knew
I'm sorry for never sharing a glance
I'm sorry I didn't have those feelings too

I'm sorry that I don't know what else to say
  I'm sorry I don't know how to make you stay
I'm sorry I just can't find a way
  I'm sorry for the wrongs I do, I'm sorry for not noticing you

I'm sorry for having to ask for a second chance, and for being in my own little trance

I'm sorry I can't promise you everything
  I'm sorry I can't give you a beautiful ring

I'm sorry that you don't know how much I care for you, and I'm sorry I don't know if you care for me too.  I'M SORRY

"Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing"

© Copyright 2000 Josh A. - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 2000-11-19 08:59 PM


I really liked this good job on your expression.
TopGunLauren
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2 posted 2000-11-19 10:17 PM


  Well your poem is very touching because it shows so much emotion. In a way I can relate to what the poem is saying because I'm sorry for a lot of the situations I've been in and still am in. Because it seems like in a lot of the situations I'm in right now are hurting my close friends. But all I can say is pray about it and no matter how hard it is know eventually it will get better.Keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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3 posted 2000-11-19 11:24 PM


I can really feel the remorse and sadness in this piece. I hope things work out for you, and you definently have my prayers! God bless!

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-11-20 05:22 PM


I think this poem gets your point across very well.  I hope things work out for you in the end.  Good job expressing your feelings in this poem

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5 posted 2000-11-24 06:29 PM


I like the repetition in this one. I liked it a lot. Very good!



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tq_99
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6 posted 2000-11-24 06:44 PM


Thanks everybody, you have no idea how much your encouraging words mean to me right now. Thank you, and god bless you all.

- tq_99

"Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing"

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