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if only you knew (another for my bf)
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if only you knew (another for my bf) |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia 
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If only you knew- If only you knew What you did to me Everytime you smile and laugh My insides jump with glee When you softly kiss my hand I get butterfly’s all inside With you I am so comfortable My feelings don’t need to hide The warm feeling inside I get it when we hug And that look you give It gives my heart a tug I can never understand why it is That you are mine What have I done so special All I gave to you was that rhyme I’m so thankful for everything you’ve done And everything that you’ll ever do If only you knew I love you most, so true!! * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is so tender and sweet Luvnkris ... you are very fortunate to have found such warmth and caring with your friend ... your words have a very rhythmic flow in this, nicely done.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
I love this poem girl! I feel the same way about my G/F. I still can't understand why we were brought together...I never thought I'd find someone who could understand me so well and just me feel comfortable around her. This is a great poem, and you did a great job of expressing yourself. Keep it up! "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"I can never understand why it is That you are mine" I had that part ready to quote before I even saw niceguy's reply about it. The poem is really good, it sounds like things are great for you "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey hey hey Great poem wow ive heard good poems b4 and well i know this is another one. Gosh you wrote so sincerly its so great and i have a ? for ya at the end where it says "what have i done so specail, all i gave you was a rhyme" well does that mean youve given him a poem b4 cuz if so it must've been great buh bye ~`Branden`~ "put the name of the person u love, not in a heart because they alway break but put it in a circle which last forever" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a beautiful poem. You are so lucky to have someone that you love this much. You express your feelings very well. Keep up the great work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love all there is"- Zukav |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Hey good poem. Your lucky to have someone so special in your life like that. I used to have a special guy in my life but he wasn't the right guy. Minna |
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luvnkris Member
since 2000-08-31
Posts 144Perth, Australia |
hey thanx for your replys! branden- yeh, how we got 2gether is pretty weird actually!he's 2 yrs older - a yr 12 at my school, (i'm yr 10) and i had this crush on him 4 a while! and we talked on icq a bit. and he had just broken up with his gf a few weeks ago, and he was asking me who i liked and stuff. and finally i sent him this poem that i wrote and he said it was the nicest thing anyone has ever done for him! and he asked me a few days later! and that was about 5mths ago, and he is the most perfect guy i've ever known! and he's everything to me! & the best thing is... he feels the same way about me! if you read some of my other poems - there's one that he wrote for me and theres the one i originally gave to him as well i think!anyways sorry its long!! Luv Jo. xoxo * never live a second without being grateful for all you have around you* |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
luvnkris- this is so sweet. such lovely and gentle emotions you've expressed here...so glad to hear that you have someone who makes you so happy. take care, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
reading this was a delight...esp enjoyed the third verse..thank you for sharing the warm feeling inside i get it when we hug and that look you give it gives my heart a tug |
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mopey Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 12 |
hey it is good to see a happy poem here! there are such gloomy poems all the time, but usually those are the best. well, n e way i loved this poem. keep writing happy ones for me i love to read them. thought i can never write them.  love ya mopey |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is such a sweet poem!! You describe the best feelings in the world...aww i loved this poem!! Your so lucky to have found someone to make you feel that way hun =o) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. things are going great for you!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is very sweet. I only have one thing to say though. He is yours he makes you happy and everyone deserves to be.  Glad to see happy people in passions for a changeI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Awww this was so sweet!!!Sounds like he is really special to you. I wish you the best of luck with him. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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