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Warmth of anothers Love
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Warmth of anothers Love |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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11.13.00 I think just for tonight I'll expose my heart to you As I sit here alone Pouring out my fears onto paper Protected only by the thoughts of you And by the flickering candle light Of this solitary candle This music radiating from my soul Longs to grip onto something sturdy Onto something I know that would never leave me cold And my body longs to be enveloped In something warm that would last for hours For it's always tricked by the pleasurable warmth of a shower Inviting and caressing away the pain Yet laughs cruelly, when I walk away I'm unable to trap in the warmth within the folds of my towel I love it all sinking deep down Into each and every crevice and pore But curse god once I have to walk out the bathroom door Am I wrong, to long for something to make me feel safe and secure And sometimes when I lie under my covers I cry, helplessly Letting the tears fall down onto my lips Wondering if it's always going to be like this Alone for another lifetime Cold, stranded, unable to feel the warmth of anothers love [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (edited 11-16-2000).] |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
WOW that was so awesome. you really did pour your heart out on this one. it was so emotional and had so much feeling. great poem!  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. A lot of depth and emotion in this one. I could feel it......it was literally touching me all over.....how dare it! What a fresh poem! Ugh! Ok but anyway great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Like the others, I felt the emotions in this one. It seemed very real and sincere. "Am I wrong, to long for something to make me feel safe and secure" This line made me stop for a bit to think. This is a very good poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Its an amazing poem!the emption is so vivd so real....wow...i have no words Ina |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW! Excellent descriptive verse Ceinwyn! Your imagery and the emotions you've captured in this piece are superb ... really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
every poem of your that i read seems to get better and better and better. you never seize to amaze me. you're bonded words are undeniably of talent. i'm so jealous of all your possibilities. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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