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Two-Tone Winter |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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As I look outside, through cloudy days the winter covers land, in so many ways and the color white, covers the sun's rays it blurs my sight, as this tree sways in my cold eyes, snow falls without delay my mind thinks of, the old Boston bay where history lurks, and frosty ice lay Oh how I love lands, of white and gray Jeremy Raulinaitis 11/13/00 "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Pretty words, such pretty words. I really enjoyed reading this. A sense of peace came over me..Great job.  ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The words were beautiful and the ryhme scheme was nice. Great job on this one jeremy  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Brrrrrrr, winter is cold, but I love it Good job on this poem, I liked the feel of it."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely written Jeremy, and wonderfully descriptive, well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
thanks for compliments guys, it means a lot. hope to hear more replies please? "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Told you I'd read more! This is really pretty. Very descriptive.... serene. Good job.xoxo Jenn "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jeremy~ You painted a beautiful picture for us all to see. Well done my friend...Keep it up!!! People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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