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mr0001
Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 39


0 posted 2000-06-13 01:38 AM




you pushed
   and i bent
you pushed
   and i bent
you pushed
   and i broke
what did you expect to happen?
you can only push so far
and i'm not that flexible



 "crazy" is just who you are...amplified.

some people draw the outlines in life, i chose to add the color.


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Jenabou
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA
1 posted 2000-06-13 06:28 PM


You are an outstanding poet
you keep me coming back here hoping to read more of your work
Your very in tough with yourself and have a beautiful way of expressing it.
you seem to like my work also so im wondering
do you have an e-mail adress?
keep in touch!  

Snickers
Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88
East Haddam, CT
2 posted 2000-06-13 07:18 PM


Wow!!! I really like this.  It isn't long or in any standardized structure, but it's straight to the point and so true.  Some people just ask too much of you, and you can only push so far.  I think there's a point were we all "break".  Great job!

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

Novacaine For The Soul
Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122
New Orleans
3 posted 2000-06-14 12:37 PM


dear mister,
     deceptively profound... i love the repetitive bending lines... definately adds to the feel of the words of this poem... keep up the wonderful work  

sincerely,
a sad tomato

 you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...

StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-06-14 06:55 PM


Nicely done!   you have a wonderful way of expressing yourself! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

 "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"

AnGeLiX17
Junior Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 46
Salisbury, NC
5 posted 2000-06-14 08:30 PM


Like... whoa... I've felt this before but I could never find the words for it... mail me subliminalfreak_@hotmail.com

           Apathetic Angel

We're all dumb and jaded and I hope to God I figure out whats wrong...


ChibiDeathscythe
Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128

6 posted 2000-06-14 09:23 PM


Profound, yet so invitingly simple. Excellent work. Ai yi! (Japanese for I Luv it ^_^)

 "Suicides have already betrayed the body.
Still born, they don't always die,
bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet
that even children would look on and smile."
-- "Wanting to Die" by Anne Sexton

Adversity Builds character. - Japanese Proverb

"'Even a fool has one talent'.....darn, I'm not even a fool." - My sister, the master of cunning wit


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