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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
flickering candle flame as unsteady as my heart tell me what it is that broke me and my heart Tell me how it all happened and where I go from here flickering candle flame stop the tears that bleed and mold the pieces back together flickering candle flame why did it have to be? tell me why it hurts so bad and hold me until it hurts no more kiss me with your warm and welcoming touch the touch I long for flickering candle flame go back it time take back the pain teach him that isn't right it isnt right to think he'll get away show him what he did and make him realize the severity of his mistake nake him see that what he did is not ok and even though he'll get his licensce back in a few short years, I'll never get my only love my best friend back because he made a mistake because he drank one too many and thought he could drive I'll never see that smile again I'll never hear his voice and I'll never be in his arms again all because, flickering candle flame he made a mistake... one that cost my best friend his life *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I could see you holding the candle and weeping at the same time while I was reading this poem. I honestly do not know what to say for you have just gone thru so much pain. I just wish I was an angel so I could just fly there and take your pain away. But I'm not. I don't know if you're gonna read this reply for I've noticed that you haven't been answering your replies lately. But as i've said in my previous replies, i'll always be hear for ya. keep your head up Jess I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I love how you compared your heart to a candle flame, it's a really good comparison  The whole poem is kind of sad, but I like how you set things up for the ending. People who drink and drive are stupid. Awesome poem!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem! I loved the title and the poem along with it. Great job! another great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem. so much pain was revealed here. awesome poem! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
My eyes are misty, I dunno about everyone else's here.  This is extremely sad, and it happens way too much. I'll never understand why bad things happen to good people, it makes no sense. Maybe, somehow, this person will learn from his horrible mistake. I know that probably doesn't help you much. Hang in there, I'm here. Smile Bel |
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