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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2000-11-06 04:51 PM


Please love me for who I am
For what I'm about to be
And for my unfolding destiny
Please be there when I cry at night
And wake up dripping with fright
Hold me tenderly in your arms
And whisper a sweet lullabye of words
Ending and fighting the demons off just like Excalibur
Can't you tell that I've been alone too long
Drifting off in the dark
Waking up constantly
Dreaming between fantasy and reality
As my candle light flickers in the night
Dancing and prancing amongst the twilight
And the shadows clutching at my mind
So please love me if you can
Never leave me and keep me safe from harm
For I'm beggining to think that I am spell bound
And that your words are as mighty as King Arthur's sword...

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"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~


[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (edited 11-06-2000).]

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liqwidnik
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since 2000-11-04
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1 posted 2000-11-06 06:37 PM


Ceinwyn- I take you have read the Arthurian Legends  But anyway I loved the poem it expresses some good emotions and I absolutely loved it. Keep up with the work

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2000-11-06 07:14 PM


  Hey. I love the theme you used here, with Excalibur and everything. It was pieced together with a certain....flare. I loved it, and enjoyed reading it.  < !signature-->

747 fell out of Heaven
Crashed through the roof of a 7-11
You're working on a slurpee
Things get hazy
Reach for a twinkie now you're pushing up daisies?
Do you know where you're gonna go?


[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-06-2000).]

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-11-06 09:46 PM


This was really well done, I like it a lot

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15
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4 posted 2000-11-06 09:49 PM


With every poem I read by you I get more and more amazed...I love your writing...You have talent keep it up!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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5 posted 2000-11-07 01:11 AM


Yes as I read you more i come to realize your passion for medievil times.

wonderful!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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6 posted 2000-11-08 06:09 PM


seems like you are a damsel in distress.  Whoever you are summoning, i hope he really is as noble as King Arthur.  Forget the lancelots for they stab people in the back.  Good luck.  Thanks for the royal read  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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