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The Battle Is Over
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The Battle Is Over |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I cant cry anymore, But the tears continue to fall. I dont know what to do anymore, Everything is out of control. I cant make it through this, Dont tell me i can. You'd be honest with me, If you were really my friend. You see how badly i'm hurting, You see the tears in my eyes. But you look away from me, And continue to deny. Well face the facts, It'll be over soon. Nothings worked, I'm bound to face my doom. I dont even love anymore, Why should i care? For the people who are trying to save me, But if i fall they arent there? I dont know who your kidding, But u'll see in the end. That not even you could save me, Not even you my friend. So what do you want me to do? Continue to smile? While inside, I'll just continue to die all this while? Well i cant continue to fight, The battle is done. Good has given in, The evil has won. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
This was so sad. I hope this wasn't based on reality, although it probably was. If this is a true story i hope it all works out for you  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written Shugar ... you've expressed a tremendous amount of sorrow in this piece. If this is true to life, please tell people around you how much you are hurting so they are aware and can help. There is no need to continually smile and put up a happy front when you are feeling sad. Confide in someone how you are feeling, and please feel free to e-mail me directly if I can be of any help. Hugs to you for these difficult and heart-felt thoughts. Best wishes, /Kit |
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~SwEEt_LiL_GirL~ Junior Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 21 |
WOW! what else can i say? this poem is very good! You are an excellent writer! Keep up the wonderful work and i hope to see more! Thank you for replying to mine!! you really made me feel at ease for posting my poems. Thank you once again! God bless!=) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
LIke always shugar, a wonderful post!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
If you're fighting this battle don't just give in and give up, you have to stay strong. I think the poem did a great job of showing pain, good job on it! "You see how badly i'm hurting, You see the tears in my eyes." "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thank you all for replying! Sweet- I'm glad that i make you feel at ease!! =o)You too are a wonderful writer in my opinion. |
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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
this is soo sad! i really feel for you.luved the poem..great work and i hope all gets better!! "just because you dont know it or havent seen it, doesnt mean it isnt possible" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Shugar~ I am so amazed that I feel speechless... This is the way that I feel with my best friend...Things have been rough with us lately and I just dont know what to say to her...You put all the words right into my mouth...Thank you for sharing this piece with us...My favorite line was this one: For the people who are trying to save me, But if i fall they arent there? I dont know who your kidding, But u'll see in the end. That not even you could save me, Amazing work as always!!!Keep it up!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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~SwEEt_LiL_GirL~ Junior Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 21 |
xShUgArHiGhx your welcome!!!!!!!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
If youneed to talk to someone, I'm all ears Email me or find me on AIM. my username is acire4ever....Keep your head up. Smile for once  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Been there, done that. It bites. But whatever you do, don't let yourself be forced to act as if nothing's wrong. I can tell ya that from experience.. It was a terrific poem, by the way. Just don't let darness take over... ~Carly |
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