Teen Poetry #3 |
gallion (intro) |
Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
I was thinking about writing a poetry book this would be the intro I don't care if it sonds conceeded I write now for those starved of letters and words for those who search desparatly for inteligent life only to drown in their futility. this small verse as it cuts through a sea of ignorance and the intelectual void that these waters are, this poem is the mast-head for the massive gallion that is to follow. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I loved it. Extremely good intro. It got me hooked, I wanna read more!! ~Carly< !signature--> 747 fell out of Heaven Crashed through the roof of a 7-11 You're working on a slurpee Things get hazy Reach for a twinkie now you're pushing up daisies? Do you know where you're gonna go? [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think this is a good intro! Not conceeded at all. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Not conceited Not bad But good good good and good luck with the book! "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Conceited? No. It's good....I think you mentioned something about it to me before...but I'm not sure...*need sleep!* Alright man, keep it up, I'll write you soon Bel |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
This would be an awesome intro to a poetry book. you really should write one, use your poems and poems of others! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanx guys, this is the type of feedback I need to encourage the book. I really was afraid that the forward(intro)would sound as if I were blowing my own horn. |
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