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liqwidnik Junior Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 33Mantua, NJ, USA |
The love we once had has withered and died The laughs we once shared no longer echo in my mind We have so many memories Do you even remember? The months of happiness The weeks of bliss They are gone now I missed them for a while But now I realise They were fake The words you spoke the kisses you gave All were lies You lied to me You broke my heart And why? To get what you wanted But did you? NO Will you? not from me "We can not truely love someone with whom we never laugh"- Agnes Repplier |
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JennyeMeshan Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 103Cecil, Wisconsin USA |
You have every right to be angry. Put him his place girl! Great poem. ~JeNnYeMeShAn~ "If thou can wait then thou shall stay" -Destiny's Child |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
At first i started reading this poem and got this vibe of depression , whic you probably started out writing in....but them WHAM........it pops out with this in-your-face attitude of bitterness and rage. I liked it a lot hehe.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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kimmy Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 98 |
this was a sweet poem...i felt the same wya a hilw ago...screw this guy..hes not worth it..im glad uh ave moved on...nic peom..i really enjoyed it.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Liqwidnik! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family! What a powerful first post. Loved the positive ending ... hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Great first post. I felt the same way Dopey did about this, I like the attitude in it. Good job and I'm going to read your other poems right now  ! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
HEY! Welcome. I loved this!! Like Dopey, I thought the change from depressed to havin an attitude was really kickin. See ya l8erz!! ~Carly< !signature--> 747 fell out of Heaven Crashed through the roof of a 7-11 You're working on a slurpee Things get hazy Reach for a twinkie now you're pushing up daisies?Do you know where you're gonna go? [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-05-2000).] |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey this is great! I too thought it was gonna be a depressed kind of poem...I love the ending. Good luck, keep it up Bel |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Welcome!! this was a grrrreat first post hope to read many more If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Welcome to passions! this was a great first post and i hope to read more! Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Ha..Curly just wrote exactly the same thing Tamma did  I'm glad to see someone that has the strength that you've shown you have in this piece. Thanks for sharing and don't firget that you could share as much as you want Again welcome to passions' family I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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