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he wanted to die |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
he cried to me as I whispered of days and years past, smiles absorbed by the painless sun, and we laughed and we cried, for those days had left then, the words came out he wanted to die, words will forever remain the pain...stabbing my heart stopping my breath, we talked, talked for hours, I tried I did I really really did but the phone still rang and I still walked, alone with out him and on with the rest of my life he didn't listen and it didn't matter when I loved him *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
He cares wether you love him or not. Your poem says it right there. If the phones sting rings, it means he does. "but the phone still rang" Remember that I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was so sad.... Good luck!!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
what a wonderful piece. i dig this one very much. the rhythm was clever and smooth. and i LOVE that signature. beautiful. Everyone's got their demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Um..Jess....I'm lost. It's good but....lost....help... Bel |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
acire~ the phone still rang...with a crying mom on the other end to tell me je had committed suicide. talked for hours, I tried I did I really really did but the phone still rang and I still walked, alone with out him make sense now???? *Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow. I guess anything I try to say probably won't help you. But I truely hope that you mke it through this time and feel better soon. The poem was really good, the emotion in it was very sincere. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i guess i did misunderstand your writing...my bad thanks for explaining Jess I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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