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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I broke my biggest promise, The one i made to you. I said i'd never do it, And thats what i planned to do. But that was long ago, And i was sad last night. Your words out of my head, My hand shaking in fright. I know i shouldnt do it, I know that its wrong. I promised you i wouldnt, But i guess i lied all along. As i confessed to you my mistakes, The look in your eyes i couldnt take. I hurt you so bad, It wasnt suppose to be this way. You reassured me, I'd have better days. That better day, Didnt come in time. And now i'm left with this scar, And the memory behind. I'm sorry i went against you, And the promise we made. I hope you can forgive me, And see how i know i was wrong. I should have listened to you, Like i knew all along. |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
This was written very well, but I wish I knew what you did. Not to accuse you, but this is what I am curious about: Did you cheat or something worse? Get back to me if you could. Your poem interested me. Good Job & Keep up the good work, hon!  (:***stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The way you express your pain in this poem was well done. I will not give you comments or questions on the content because if it's about cheating i'd say a lot of mean things that i would not regret. I hope all turns out well, keep posting!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, this poem does leave out the details of what you did, but I dunno, it makes it kind of mysterious and I like the effect. Anyway, good writing "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Yankee10n20BFF Junior Member
since 2000-11-02
Posts 27T-Town, AL |
This was really well written. I love the irony! No matter what you are going through, all you have to do is close your eyes and dream cause no one can take them away from you. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey everyone...although i am not going to reveal what i did (sorry!!) i have to say that it had NOTHING to do with cheating or any type of betrayel. It had to do with me and no other person was involved...i just went against my friends wishes by being influenced too greatly by my emotions. Thanx for the replies! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Shugar~ We all make mistakes that we wish we could change...Its a part of life that we go through...You just have to except what you did and learn from it...You expressed yourself beautifully...Keep up the good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well at least it wasnt cheating. Thank God....... that would have been a tragic thing. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
you really know how to express ur pain very well. i'm glad that you didn't cheat cuz i feel cheating is one of the worse things you can do to a person. great poem Curlz "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this poem just got me all curious. the way you wrote it shows how that you have done a really bad thing. it's glad that you are sorry for it, but it makes me so curious to know what you have done so bad that you wrote such a marvelous poem I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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tq_99 Junior Member
since 2000-11-14
Posts 45Las Vegas, NM, US |
This was a very well written poem, I will not give any comments or ask any suggestions. I think I know what it might be, because it's sounds like my ex-best-friend. I will pray that whatever it might be that you can get through it. Keep up the good work, and good luck with whatever you are going through. God Bless, - tq_99 "Some say a rich man has it all but if he has no friends he is nothing" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
We all make mistakes, my friend. The friends that you are writing about have made their fare share, also. You have apologized, and they should be ready to forgive you. You describe your feeling well. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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