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My skin is a kleenex
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My skin is a kleenex |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Ok guys this is an extended metaphorical poem, or supposed to be, for western lit so tell me what you think cuz i have to turn it in. believe me i could find better things to write about than comparing me to an object! My skin is a kleenex So soft and so thin Sometimes lotioned Sometimes dry Easily ripped or broke Easily pulled apart So weak and fragile Yet strong to the touch Often full of color Sometimes ghostlike It can smell sweet But still look plain My skin is a kleenex In more ways than one "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think this is just fine to turn in. BUt why is a kleenex sometimes ghostlike? That's all that perplexed me. But everything is great and the ending concludes the whole thing just wonderfully. nice job! Def. A!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
dopey you are a dope have you never seen a kleenex float in the wind it does look like a ghost anyway i did like it you have some good comparasons and should get a good grade "Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist "Post bellum auxilium"~where were you when i needed you |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
LOL!!!!!!!!!!! That's funny girl, it seems like it has more meaning than just skin...maybe I'm wrong, who knows. Remind me one day to send you the one that woman made me write.....she'd better give you an A, good job   Bel |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
I have to agree with Isabel. it does make you think a little bit. Great Job!  (:***stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, I think this shows how you could be like a kleenex very well, good job writing it "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I like this one...Very different... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is cool. Should get a good grade Keoni |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
emptyness called me a dope  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I think she means that she's as white as a ghost like a kleenex is plain ghostly white. Hey, does this mean that i could wipe my face on your skin too?  just kiddingI see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Thanks for your replies guys! acire, you were right, i did mean white as a ghost, like kleenex's are usually white. but ummmmmmm i don't know you well enough for you to USE my skin as a kleenex! lol just kidding. I appreciate the ummmmm compliment or whatever you call it hehe Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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~SwEEt_LiL_GirL~ Junior Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 21 |
CurlyGurly~ Its good, very interesting, i hope you get a good grade out of what you turn in i hope to see more of your poems!! keep up the great work! God bless |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I relly didn't mean it anyway but a joke as a kleenex is used for wiping too but still, you're welcome curlyfries I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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