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My saving Grace...
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My saving Grace... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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This is to someone very close and near to my heart..I love him dearly..and hehe no it's not Jeremy..someone that I was very fortunate to meet in the past few months and he's proven to be a true and dear friend.. 29.10.00 My soul calls out to him In the middle of the night Once I'm taken over by the built up fright Taken place within the previous hours of the day I just cry to god as I lay alone and cold in my bed Praying that he would just come and take me away And take me to a safe place Just as long as I continue to feel safe just by one look at his face God knows that his smile is my saving grace But tears continue to fill my eyes each and every night I no longer take pleasure in this strenuous life For I am shackled and chained And always to blame But once I speak his name in my prayers to God The burdens of my heart seem to unload And make their way up to the stars And as I drift off to sleep he erases all the scars And from that moment on I no longer feel the need to scream Only when I once wake up from a perfect dream... |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
This is quite a beautiful poem! You truely have a talent honey! I just hope you know that your "chains" don't need to be yours to carry. You obviously know that God is there for you, rain or shine. I hope you're not feeling any sorrow or pain in this relationship- because Jesus has a love GREATER than any love we could experience here on earth. I want you to know that the dream can fade, and the reality that Jesus is there comes out. Jesus is THE saving grace. Never the less, you are such a wonderful poet, and I wish you nothing but joy! God Bless and Keep Smiling  Those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint. Isaiah 40:3 |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"And from that moment on I no longer feel the need to scream Only when I once wake up from a perfect dream..." This is a wonderful piece. I know how it feels to long for something, and to feel so angry when you awake from a dream of it. I am also glad that you turn to God when you are alone! I agree with everything that LoveAll said. Keep up the great work! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Ceinwyn~ I thought that this poem was so good that I had to read it twice!!!You did an amazing job on it...And I give you 5 stars and 2 thumbs up!!!Keep up the good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
What a great job of getting your feelings out, this poem is very good "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OH well this was a great tribute to your friend. I am sure he enjoyed it very much. Great job and i hope to see more.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Well done. "But once I speak his name in my prayers to God The burdens of my heart seem to unload And make their way up to the stars And as I drift off to sleep he erases all the scars" simply beautiful writing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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