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0 posted 2000-11-01 07:27 PM



You look into my eyes,
I see your in pain.
I know how your feeling.
I feel just the same.
I want to say it will all be better,
That this is just a game.
But i know what this has done to you,
You will be forever changed.
Dont give up hope,
Please take my hand.
Know that i'm here,
Know I understand.

© Copyright 2000 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-11-01 08:03 PM


This has a great meaning. I have trouble with it though because someone told me that, so I held out my hand it wasn't met. She was gone, again. If you are going to offer, make good with your promise and you will be held in the highest regards.
                                      Keoni

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2 posted 2000-11-01 09:53 PM


Shugar~
Realizing that someone else is going through what you go through is somewhat good...Cuz then you have someone to help and get help from...It may be a difficult situation but you wont need to go looking for help then...You did a really good job on this!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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3 posted 2000-11-02 03:22 PM


What a nice poem, it's good to hear that you will be there for them   Good job on the poem!!

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4 posted 2000-11-02 04:16 PM


Excellent poem! I loved it!!

"Dont give up hope,
Please take my hand.
Know that i'm here,
Know I understand."

those last lines were my favorite part! Great job! keep up the awesome work, and keep writing!!

Luv,
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~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~

[This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 11-02-2000).]

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5 posted 2000-11-02 06:41 PM


This was great. Thanks for sharring. I don't really have anything elaborate to say about this poem, because when i finished i just smiled and liked it.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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6 posted 2000-11-03 04:02 PM


that's really really sweet, shugar. I just thought that I would tell you that.
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7 posted 2000-11-04 02:48 PM


I'm glad that you guys liked it...Thanx for all of your reply's!!
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8 posted 2000-11-04 02:54 PM


wow this was really really sweet. for me it's hard to look into a guys eyes without tearing up, of course it's only been once, but anyway. great poem!  
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9 posted 2000-11-24 06:20 PM


awww....what a way to reassure someone.  My heart just skipped a beat.  this is really very sweet

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10 posted 2000-11-24 07:53 PM


"Shared joy is double joy
Shared sorrow is half sorrow" -Sweedish proverb

You've proved this quote very well in this piece. I hope you always have someone to share your experiences with.  

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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