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Life Convincing the Soul
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Life Convincing the Soul |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: Just in case....this is a dialogue between Soul and Life... Life Convincing the Soul: "Hello, Mr. Life" said Soul, "Pardon me if I ask, But aren't you the one that told me To take things slow, not fast?" "Ah yes, Soul" said Life, "I did mean to inform That things are taken slow Unless a time gap torn." "And if a time gap torn" said Soul, "What does it all mean? That you rush your way of day, And subdue to the time feind?" "Ah yes, Soul" said Life, "Reform your unhealthy ways. It's all that you can do In conformist society days." "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
hey Javier, wow, i really liked the way u wrote it in the form of a dialogue between life and the soul. to very importtant things....i was curious is there antipathy bettween them?...umm well whatever....very,awesome poem!! check ya later ~Ina~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey Javi. This was really neato!! Heh, extremely creative idea. I loved it!! Stay koo, man. Ciao. ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is an extremely creative idea. Writing this is the form of a dialogue is very unique. It describes our feelings in a whole new way. Very Cool Keoni |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Dopey, that was interesting. Kind of reminded me of what goes on inside my head. Anyways, I loved it!!! Love ya!!! Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was really creative Dopey!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I don't know that I've ever read a poem in this forum that used dialouge, I like it  Very creative, and very well done!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Im glad you all liked how it was written in dialogue, but have you delved within the message or the meaning of this? Cuz all im getting is "creative poem".....i don't know. This whole thing has meaning to it....i hope somebody delves within it.....if not....ok with me! hehe  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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