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Ode To I
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Ode To I |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
i write alone i write to thee i write my heart With truth indeed I speak alone I speak to thee I speak my heart Only to thee I see alone I see through thee I see with my heart Put trust in me I hear alone I hear words of thee I hear my heart Singing fancy glee I feel alone I feel without thee I feel my heart Is alone indeed I stand alone I stand not with thee I stand on my heart As it folds before me I die alone I die in thee I die in my heart Watching you flee |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. I loved it!! I love how it seems lal sweet and great in the beginning but then slowly diminishes into this sad mood of being all alone and such. This was great. Your mind concocted a very well written piece. Good!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed your style in this Hoppy ... very rhythmic. Your thoughts take us from one emotion to another ... with a very smooth transition, nicely written!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think Dopey and Kit hit it exactly right, nice transition in your thoughts, and nicely done poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. What they said..heh. I loved it. I really loved it. The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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